Proposal like this one. does it really work? what are your insights?

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When I saw your name next to mine, In our wedding card, I felt blessed. When I saw you smile, Seeing me in the traditional bride groom dress, I felt teased. When I held your hand, During the marriage rituals, I felt responsible. When you entered my lonely bachelor life, And changed it into a heavenly abode, I felt lucky. When you showed the same love as I did, Towards my parents, I felt proud. When you scolded me, For neglecting my heath amidst my hectic work, I felt pampered. When I saw you scream, Crying out of labor pains, I felt helpless. When I saw tears of happiness in your eyes, As you looked at our kid, I felt blessed once again. All these feeling have bloomed in my heart, But are yet to blossom in reality. As these are feelings I long to feel, For these are still unfelt. Will you marry me?