A Poem I Wrote...What Do You Think?

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I wrote this poem a few weeks ago for my Creative Writing class in school. My teacher loved it, and so did my parents. But Im wondering if it is really as good as they all say it is, since I have never written poetry before. Its called Bullet, and its based on the personification of a bullet. Small and deadly, encased in gold My mission in life is dark and cold Deep down in the chamber I lay Patiently waiting to be shot away He concentrates as his senses awake I rattle in the chamber as the soldier shakes He narrows and eye and takes careful aim His goal is to kill, to murder, to maim My angry world explodes around me The spark, it burns, I cannot see The trigger was pulled, the powder ignites I can suddenly sense Death's lonely bite Now, soaring through the air I am As I join the fight for Uncle Sam The enemy's eyes widen as I grow near Caught in the headlights like a shivering deer Plunging deep into the soldier's chest Warmth surrounds me, a crazed blood fest The fatal wound, cannot be mended This soldier's life, I have ended. So thats it. Im proud of it, but I look forward to hearing all your opinions. So, what do you think of it? Got a favorite part? Anything? Lay it on me. :)