Advice needed

Hi Fizzytom, Thanks for the positive and encouraging feedback. It is nice to be given a shimmer of hope when it feels like you have been absorbed into darkness. Hopefully a little tweek here and there will do the trick. ~ may in every way this be a special day ~

Sorry the link did not work for you. I tested it when I posted and again just now and it seemed to work just fine for me. I do have white spaces between my paragraphs I am a huge believer in spaces. I will take on board what you said about the paragraphs and bad raters. I must say your opening lines about knowing what is wrong without looking is rather offensive. I realise that you are a highly respected and well written Helium writer but you are not very welcoming. I have had you critique my work before and found that you can be harsh and abrasive so I am trying not to take your comments personally. I mean how are you to know whether I am vulnerable or not right now. Thanks for taking the time to comment

Hello, I did not mean to come over as harsh or abrasive and am sorry that I am perceived in this way. I work with perhaps 300 new members a week on Helium and my assumption was based on my experience of people and approach to Helium. I can now access your article and would make the following observations. 1. It isn't rated highly enough. It is informative and contains more information than others in the category. 2. The layout is what lets it down. Having odd sentences as headings but not making them clear enough as being headings turns up in the rating box as bitty. None of what I say is meant to be critical and I am sorry if I come over as being so. I am passionate about helping writers to gain maximum potential on the site, and if your article was changed to pose the questions which are now posed in single sentences in some kind of highlighted way, i.e. perhaps capital letters for titles, I think the article would do better. The other way you could present it in a better way would be to expand on the questions and make them into paragraphs. I really am trying to help here and am upset that I have indeed upset you or any other member with comments and suggestions.

Sorry Rachel, I didn't mean to upset you either. I fear I was a bit harsh on you and I do apologise. I was having a terrible day and reading your first comment didn't help at all. Though that was no excuse to treat you like I did when you were only trying to be helpful. I am glad that you were able to read the article, I will have a look at the sentence structure and possible headings. I realise that I have a great deal of improvements to make within my writing techniques and I really do welcome criticism. It is not possible to improve without it. Thanks again and no hard feelings

Thanks for your comments Writerbob. I am going to have a look at the structure and organisation now. I know that you said you didn't think it was worth a rewrite but I am going to. I was the first writer on this topic and I put a fair bit of effort (well more than usual) into research so getting number one is important as I can see that most people have just written their article based on my information! Thanks again for your kind words. I will have a look at you on helium