help !

@gxnfly (1147)
China
June 4, 2008 10:38pm CST
I just started my new job.The company is think of expand overseas market,so they need an English version of the website.I just wrote a brief introduction of the company,but I'm not sure if the grammar and experssions are perfect.Can someone kind read it for me,and change it a litte to make it perfect? as you know my mother tongue is Chinese. Here is the introduction: Duan Dian Hand painting was found in 2005, named Ou Ni Wan Hand painting Studio in the past. In July 2007 registered as a Limited Company with the registered capital of millions of RMB. The company mainly engaged in various high-quality hand-painted artworks. It includes produce, design, painting, and products delivery. Designers and painters are all graduated from Xian Academy Of Fine Arts. It has a super productivity and wealth of creativity. The company's products are all for the limited edition, each product has its unique code/name/significance. Duan Dian icon and Duan Dian DD (icon) are brands of the company that has registered with the exclusive copyright. We will do our utmost to meet your satisfaction! --------Xi’an Duandian hand painting co. ltd Thank you a million!
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LouRhi
@LouRhi (1502)
• Australia
5 Jun 08
Hi gxnfly. Here are some changes I would make Duan Dian Hand Painting was founded in 2005. Prior to this it was known as Ou Ni Wan Hand Painting Studio. In July 2007 Duan Dian registered as a Limited Company with the registered capital of millions of RMB. The company mainly engages in various high-quality hand-painted artworks. It oversees the production, design, painting, and delivery. All designers and painters have graduated from Xian Academy Of Fine Arts. With a wealth of creativity at it's disposal Duan Dian offers high levels of productivity combined with exceptional uniqueness. Each product is a limited edition, and features a code and name combined with an explanation about it's significance. The Duan Dian icon and Duan Dian DD (icon) are brands of the company that have registered with the exclusive copyright. We will do our utmost to meet your satisfaction. Hope this helps :)
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LouRhi
@LouRhi (1502)
• Australia
5 Jun 08
thanks, I must say I like the opening sentence that you suggested below.
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gxnfly
@gxnfly (1147)
• China
5 Jun 08
Thanks very much! That did help a lot.Now I know how poor my English is.
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LouRhi
@LouRhi (1502)
• Australia
5 Jun 08
Please don't think this means you have poor English. After I read what I posted a few more times I can see changes that should be made. That is the way English is. Almost every time you read it you can find a new way to say it. I imagine that English is not a very easy language to learn. There are so many rules and they almost always get broken.
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whiteheron
@whiteheron (4222)
• United States
5 Jun 08
Duan Dian Hand painting was formerly called Ou Ni Wan Hand painting Studio and was founded in 2005. In July of 2007 Duan Dian Hand Painting was registered as a Limited Corporation and had the registered capital of millions of RMB. The company produces, designs, and paints high-quality hand-painted artworks and then insures prompt product delivery. The designers and painters at Duan Dian Hand painting all have graduated from the Xian Academy Of Fine Arts and are very creative. Duan Dian Hand painting specializes in creating limited editions. Each product has its unique code, name and significance. Duan Dian icon and Duan Dian DD (icon) are brands of the company that has registered with the exclusive copyright. We will do our utmost to meet your satisfaction! --------Xi’an Duandian hand painting co. ltd
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gxnfly
@gxnfly (1147)
• China
15 Jun 08
Thank you very much!I'm very appreciated ,it was of great help!
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olivemai
@olivemai (4738)
• United States
5 Jun 08
Duan Dian Hand painting was founded in 2005, named Ou Ni Wan Hand painting Studio in the past. In July 2007 registered as a Limited Company with the registered capital of millions of RMB. The company mainly engaged in various high-quality hand-painted artworks. It includes produce, design, painting, and products delivery. Designers and painters have all graduated from Xian Academy Of Fine Arts. It has a super productivity and wealth of creativity. The company's products are all for the limited edition, each product has its unique code/name/significance. Duan Dian icon and Duan Dian DD (icon) are brands of the company that has registered with the exclusive copyright. We will do our utmost to meet your satisfaction! --------Xi’an Duandian hand painting co. ltd
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olivemai
@olivemai (4738)
• United States
5 Jun 08
Do not worry about it, you will learn as you go! It is difficult for people who grew up speaking English! We use slang and have dialects while the school and newspapers use perfect English!
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gxnfly
@gxnfly (1147)
• China
5 Jun 08
Thank you very much,you are really very kind.Just hope I can write perfect English articles in the futre.But now I'm a little bit frustrated,cause writing is just so difficult for me.
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saundyl
@saundyl (9783)
• Canada
5 Jun 08
I'm afraid I must ask, What do yo mean by millions of RMB? Are you meaning to say that the corporation had the registered capital worth millions Renminbi (RMB)? Thats the only part i have a question on reading it that others haven't made a suggestion on.
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gxnfly
@gxnfly (1147)
• China
15 Jun 08
Hi ,thanks for your suggestion.I thought most people know the meaning of RMB.My mistake!As you said RMB is just the initials of Renminbi.
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saundyl
@saundyl (9783)
• Canada
16 Jun 08
I had to go look it up. Thank you for confirming! I'd say people who know alot about other countries currencies would know but other people wouldn't have a clue unless they looked it up.