We've All Known Someone That Made Us Feel This Way
By littlepunk81
@littlepunk81 (21)
Canada
July 3, 2008 11:06pm CST
As the sound of our laughter
Breaks a comfortable silence
True feeling is left unguarded
And I won't let on
That you are unarmed
But my smile lets my secrets out
Making you all the wiser
To my craziness for you
And there is nothing like the moment
Where there is no moment
But us and unspoken thoughts
Said outloud in actions
Even a blind man could see
Every scary truth
That we choose to ignore
Brings more than just
Your usual understanding
And a complication
That we cant get our
Heads around or through
Becomes the one thing
We cant get
Enough of.
copywrited 2008
2 responses
@psalm1_3 (562)
• Philippines
4 Jul 08
nice poem huh!
Keep it up!
I love to write poem too, but i'm still a newbie.. ^_^
@littlepunk81 (21)
• Canada
4 Jul 08
thanks for the support!! i find poetry is a natural self expression for many of us out there.
@klaudyou (501)
•
4 Jul 08
Your work is rubbed by philosophy at some points...
A good oxymoron there...some good contrasts (like: sound-silence, unspoken-out loud, blind-see...), and, as a whole, the message is quite well put into shape.
Keep it up...!
p.s. just let me know when you're tired of feedback!
@littlepunk81 (21)
• Canada
4 Jul 08
thanks for noticing!!! one of my fave parts of writing poetry is the unlimited manipulating of words. as for the feedback, keep it coming, this is the first time i've been able to share my poetry with the world, and im very interested in how it makes people feel
