The Old West : A excerpt of my writing
By SomeCowgirl
@SomeCowgirl (32191)
United States
July 19, 2008 9:54pm CST
I am not the best writer, but I wanted to ask you all your opinion on a piece I have. Please critique, Am I an exceptional writer?
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The story was first woven five years ago when a man came to town claiming that the cowboy was of his own flesh and blood. An uncle to be exact. The townsfolk swarmed around him, warming their hands on the fire, as the man had told of the many flags stole. The man had since passed. The townsfolk assumed that the legendary cowboy had as well.[/i]
Grammar aside, what do you all think of it? Do you think that I should continue writing? This is not the very first paragraph of the story, but it is in the first chapter. Of course I will appreciate any feedback on this, but I ask that you please clip your tongue to any negative remarks.
Have a Wonderfully Lovely Day!
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@bmk188 (55)
• United States
15 Nov 08
Not enough information to determine the full impact of the story. If the rest of the story flows as easily as this paragraph does then the story is a good one. I like the flow of the paragraph and would want to read to find out more about the story. It does grab the reader's attention.
Keep up the great work.
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@SomeCowgirl (32191)
• United States
15 Nov 08
I've since pushed the story to the back burner (but it's not being singed, the burner's off). I'll try to pick the story back up when I have more time, but right now we're planning a lot. I have more of the story after that paragraph in my organizer, I'll just have to find it. I appreciate the criticism!
@hellcowboy (7374)
• United States
21 Jul 08
Baby,I think you are an exceptional writer to say the least,and that story is very very good,and I think that,that paragraph shows others how good the story is because I am sure that it leaves others wondering what else is in the story,which it is always good to leave readers wondering because when readers wonder they have to continue reading to fulfill their curosity,and I definately think you should continue writing,and I look forward to reading anything and everything you write.
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@SomeCowgirl (32191)
• United States
21 Jul 08
I really appreciate all of your comments on my stories and you know that I love to hear your input and get ideas from you. I appreciate you!
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@hellcowboy (7374)
• United States
23 Jul 08
Baby you know I only tell the truth,so I am more than happy to be honest with you and tell you that I like the things that you write,and I am always glad to try and help you come up with ideas of things to write,or things to add to what you already have written,I love you with all my heart and soul.
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@SomeCowgirl (32191)
• United States
20 Jul 08
I appreciate your compliments. If I don't write for anyone else I will write for my fiance and I. Not to long ago, I helped my fiance finish one of his stories. I rewrote it for him and gave him ideas as well as him giving me ideas to improve the plot. I really Appreciate your compliments though. I hope you have a very wonderfully lovely day!
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