Drafting a Letter...Any Help?

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I'm applying to a vocational school I previously attended and dropped out of. I loved the school, the teachers, the atmosphere; I just wasn't ready to be there yet. But now I am, and I'd like to include a business letter with my new application. My sister helped me write it, and it's great...up until the last lines. I need your help!!! Please, any assistance you can give would be greatly appreciated! The last lines currently read like this: "I would like to ask for fair consideration for re-admittance, and I hope you will take this request into consideration as my application is reviewed. Thank you for your attention in this matter." I like it, but I think "consideration" is used too much. I also think the last line is a little dry. I've tried to come up with a way to fix it and still sound both polite and intelligent, but I'm at a loss. The rest of the letter is fantastic...but I'm not too sure about the last paragraph. Is it good? Is it bad? Is it redundant? Should I leave it alone, or change it? Do you have any suggestions on a change? Help, please! Thank you in advance!