i would like to hear from anyone with an opinion!!

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i have spent years of my life in various situations from extremely low points to extremely high points,through these times i always felt relieved if i wrote down how i was feeling,it gave me a better perspective as i read it back to myself.i am far from a professional writer but i think that with a bit of tweaking i may be able to use it one day.what follows is a sample poem from my collection which i would appreciate some views on,i assure you that when i say i want as many opinions as possble it is more for the feed back than to earn money so here it is and i hope you enjoy it: Snap Out Of It i have seen suffering beyond your belief, so just think perspective next time you feel grief keeping your faith is what life's all about even the best cricketer will soon be caught out without all life's downs you can't appreciate the ups just the same as you can't enjoy tea without cups no matter how hard all the tasks are ahead sooner or later we all end up dead if you die tomorrow how much fun have you had so dont waste a lifetime on just feeling sad try making the most of each day you're alive if life was a car go from neutral to drive don't waste your life on just worrying in vain as instead of living happily you will just live in pain we know sooner or later we're all gonna die so while we're alive we should all at least try. carl wallbank well there you go thats it,i would seriously appreciate some honest opinions(i'm a man i can take it lol)and any advice or criticism would be welcomed,thank you if you,ve read this