Scary Step
@SpikeTheLobster (6403)
March 26, 2009 6:21pm CST
OK, so this is a big, scary step for me: the first time I've posted creative writing anywhere on the Internet (barring one fanfic and the cat memoir thing, which was really an article in disguise). I'd be interested to hear opinions - good, bad, ugly - if anyone feels like it!
It's at www.wordophilia.com/prologue
I shall hold my breath now. 
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@scheng1 (24649)
• Singapore
27 Mar 09
Hey, what question is that? So wicked of you to stop the story right there.
When are you publishing the story? Will it be in ebook format too?
Please post it in Helium or AC as novel excerpts. I'm sure all the readers will scold you for letting the question hang in the air.
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@SpikeTheLobster (6403)
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27 Mar 09
Thanks for reading. The story is nowhere near complete yet, especially since I recently decided it was too formulaic and probably needed rewriting slightly differently! I torture myself sometimes...
@scheng1 (24649)
• Singapore
27 Mar 09
Haven't completed the story and you are thinking of re-writing?
Don't you think it's better to finish the initial writing and then do the first cutting? At least you have the satisfaction of a complete short story on hand.
I guess writing a story is similarly to the business proposal we submit as coursework in school. Easier to complete the writings, then do the first cut to meet the word limits.
Do the 2nd cut to get rid of the excess non-essential words, and finally do an executive summary.
@ChrisMMcD (6)
• United States
27 Mar 09
great work man! i love the line starting "beasts of metal and flesh and light and gem-cut stone," very creative indeed!
@SpikeTheLobster (6403)
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27 Mar 09
One of my three favourite phrases in the text. 
Thank you for taking the time to have a look. Much appreciated!
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@AnythngArt (3302)
• United States
27 Mar 09
It's not the type of thing that I normally read, but you have some lovely phrasing in there. I can't really make a judgment about the genre. However, many people love to read literature in the style you are writing (fantasy/science fiction), so I will leave it to them to judge the material.
As for me I could get lost in your descriptive style. I love the beginning with all the gems, light, and illusions to crystals. It creates a wonderful environment. You had me up to the doors, then I started to lose interest, but as I said, it's not my usual reading material.
Good luck with your writing!
@SpikeTheLobster (6403)
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27 Mar 09
Thank you! Nice to have a point of view from someone who's not a fan of the genre: very helpful indeed. And nice to know that it's just the subject that lost your interest. 
@Charlie_28 (78)
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28 Mar 09
Mr. SPIKETHELOBSTER, you have done nice job and really writing your best part... keep it up. Writing is an art and science. Art just because it need feeling from heart and science before you should read reader's mind before writing...
