Is my poem bad? Be honest!
@BethanyBlankenship (10)
United States
August 1, 2009 3:55am CST
Hello,
I'm looking to continue in writing poems.
I just wanted some honest opinions about this one.
If it's bad you can tell me, it's not going to make me upset, mad, etc.
I like knowing what others think, because if some think it's bad,
then I can make it to where, you all like it.
If you say its bad, please tell me what you didn't like about it.
Thank you so much.
Title: Nothing but pain!
My life is nothing but pain,
I can't help but to feel ashamed,
When I looked into your eyes and said,
"I do" I believed you,
Does it make you feel good,
to destroy me inside and out?
What did I do to deserve such pain?
All I ever did was love you, want you,
and care for you,
Don't take my life away,
Just for you to feel good,
I don't want to feel pain all my life,
What happened to us?
Were you ever happy with me...
Please tell me the truth!
Thank you so much!
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