Critique needed: Crush

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I have a few odd scraps of poetry I've written, and I want to improve each. I hope you will look at it, and bring up the weak spots, and suggest to me how I can improve. A myriad of impressions fall into place. Breathe caught in throat Sensual. Lithe. Sensitive. He speaks to my heart. Drink in - Every curve, line, breath. Abrupt sense of shattering. Flown apart High and lifted up Soaring. Shattering. Crashing.