"HE" comes for Me at Night...
@ziyadahinc212 (552)
United States
February 10, 2010 1:38pm CST
He waits outside my for me in the trees. I try to keep my mind & attentions elsewhere but, i can't for I know HE's there waiting watching. I've had a "FEW CLOSE CALLS" with 'HIM', last night was the CLOSES HE's come to the house and its clear 'HE' was after me! Had my jeans NOT snagged on that pole in the yard 'HE' would have bitten me half; Before Poppa could get the door open to help... Poppa POPPA!! I cried as 'HE' lunged at me teeth bearing down for the Killer blow! "Kayla! Get back in the house GO AAGGHHH!" he yelled as I ran pass him to the door. "AAGGHHH SSNAPPP!" Is all I heard as I reached the doorway and turned to see timing that Poppa was right behind me...he wasn't.
He was HEAD FIRST in 'HIS' jaws being eaten whole! "NO NO NOOO POPPA!" I screamed as 'HE' looked at me our eyes locked and I could see my own reflection in 'HIS' stare as 'HE' throw his head back and swallowed Poppa whole. I SLAMMED the door shut and cried/screamed in agony until I fell asleep from the pain. I awoke on the floor that morning by the door hoping to hear Poppa say, "Kayla get up off the floor an come eat breakfast with me in kitchen." But, I knew that would NEVER be possible again. "Why won't HE just leave me be? What have I done to deserve THIS?!" I shouted as if I wasn't alone in the house. It's morning and 'HE' DOESN'T COME-OUT in the Daytime. I want to go outside into the woods by my house and find 'HIM' & Kill'EM for taking away ALL that was dear to ME! Yet the fear of what 'HE' can do, keeps me in the house scared out of my mind. I have to get out of here before Night Comes... Or I will end up dying here just like Poppa... Sweet loving Poppa I will miss U...
Now Mylotters, my question is; What is "HE" and will Kayla get away?
4 responses
@etioewe (142)
• Mexico
11 Feb 10
well cudos to your writes, and sounds interesting but i think mylot is a place where we discuss isusses reasonable that poeple to give thier view to due to experience they have gotten out of life or some personal knowledge that they quite know about. and also educative discussions which mylotters will understand and conribute to becuase most time when discussions are nto intersting poeple dont know what to talk about in it, but lucky you ,cos you won this one where some poeple might contribute to it by making skeptical views and comments in reponds to not understnading what on the write up. anyway it might be an intersting tip if you make it more explicit. cheers and enjoy life.
@ziyadahinc212 (552)
• United States
4 Mar 10
Just a note* "poeple" ISN'T spelled this way, *people* is the correct way!
@allyoftherain (7208)
• United States
10 Feb 10
Sounds like "HE" is a big huge monster and Kayla's going to run straight back and slay the beast. Or... she could just run. Is this something that you're writing or that you found somewhere on the internet? I like to read, but I can't take a story seriously when the writer puts dashes, & signs, and replaces full words with chat lingo. (You into U)
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@ziyadahinc212 (552)
• United States
4 Mar 10
Your a "FUNNY CRITIC" but, your eye sight needs checking... thanks for responding!
@Hatley (163776)
• Garden Grove, California
11 Feb 10
okay you have had your fun, and capitalized on Kesas musical but the phrase He comes for me at midnight you swiped from this musical and that was an altogether different song. you had me going as I thought you were a girl having a huge problem but you are a writer with a lovely vivid imagination, and you had me reading down to the end of your discussion. in order to really write this into a story though you will need to change the wording of your first phrase to avoid copyright problems with that company Kesa.
@ziyadahinc212 (552)
• United States
4 Mar 10
No I came up with that title on my own Thank You Very Much!
@Hatley (163776)
• Garden Grove, California
11 Feb 10
ziyadahinc212 well I would just harbor a wild guess that He is
your own private demon that you have battled, and that your father may have had some problems or been ill, and you feel your He, your private demon is responsible for your father's problems. if this is just a story, its not very good discussion material but if you are telling us you are Kayla and you have a private problem, a demon, that you cannot seem to solve, and you want someones help, yes then it wou ld become a discussion. From what I have read, I have thought just maybe you need to see a pychologist to get rid of He. You might need to clue us in on this ,is it a story, or a plea for help ,or what?
