Beginning of Story---WARNING: Domestic Violence involved

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I wanted to share the beginning of the story I've just started with everyone. I'm pretty happy with it...but I know writing could always use more editing (especially mine)! lol. If you are really sensitive when it comes to domestic violence, or animals being harmed...don't read! Sunny Saunders threw her clothes into the open suitcase. She hurried into the bathroom and grabbed her toothbrush, hairbrush and vitamins. She threw them into the suitcase haphazardly while Ben watched from the doorway. She zipped up the suitcase and dragged it off the bed. “Come on Ben, let’s go.” Ben stood up, wagging his tail. The large black German shepherd followed Sunny from the bed room. Sunny grabbed her keys off the kitchen table as the doorknob turned. She turned towards the door and froze. Paul came in and smiled at Sunny. When he saw the suitcase in her hand his eyes glazed over. “What the hell are you doing Sunny?” Sunny took a deep breath. “I’m leaving Paul.” “Like hell.” “This is not up to you.” Paul dropped his keys on the dining room table and moved towards Sunny. Ben stepped between them and growled. Paul kicked his head and the dog staggered backwards. Sunny dropped the suitcase. “Don’t Paul!” “Shut up!” Paul turned back to Sunny and grabbed her shoulders, throwing her backwards into the refrigerator. He grabbed her neck and dragged her face to his. “You think you’re going to leave me?” Sunny squeezed his arm, “Paul please. Don’t.” “Who do you think you are?” Paul growled. Ben hurried into the kitchen and bit Paul’s leg. Paul released Sunny and swung around. “You damn mutt!” He punched down on Ben’s head; the dog cried and let go. Paul kicked the dog’s stomach. Sunny reached forward and grabbed Paul’s shoulders, “no!” He turned around and shoved her against the fridge, then turned his attention back on the dog. He kicked the dog relentlessly, even after Ben was down. Sunny ran to the phone and punched in 911. She cried to the operator on the other line, who tried to calm her down. “Ma’am we have officers in the area,” the operator assured her. Paul snatched the phone from Sunny and hung it up. He pushed her against the counter. “The cops are coming Paul,” Sunny said before he grabbed her neck again. “If you try to leave me, I will find you. And I will kill you. Do you understand me?” Sunny stared at him, lips trembling. Paul ignored the pounding on the door. “Do you understand me!” He yelled into Sunny’s face. The police forced their way into the house, guns drawn. “Let her go now!” They yelled at Paul, forming an arch behind him. Paul let her go and raised his arms, continually glaring at Sunny. Sunny pushed her way around the men as the police handcuffed Paul. She knelt by Ben and touched his side. An officer knelt across from her and examined the dog. “Uh, ma’am, let’s get you out of here. You should go to the hospital.” “No.” “Ma’am, I really think you should-” “I said no!” “His neck is-” “I know!” Sunny glanced towards Paul. “Please just get him out of here,” she whispered to the cop. He nodded and stood up. Sunny reached out and grabbed the cops pant leg, he turned. “Please, can you keep him overnight?” The cop nodded, “for sure.” Sunny watched as they led Paul outside. She pulled Ben on to her lap, hugged his head to her chest and cried. “I’m sorry Ben. I’m so sorry.” CONSTRICTIVE criticism is always welcome! Let me know if something just doesn't sound right to you...or any issues you have with it. I just wrote this today and have not gone back to edit yet, so I know it is far from perfect! Thanks!!!