Poem for unrequited love
@killerblowXIII (123)
Philippines
March 11, 2010 4:17am CST
Here this is my poem i made long ago. Im not really good at making poem. So please pin point some error or wrong grammar i made. Here it is:
She had the face i can't forget
My own pleasure and regret.
She may be the song in my ear
That brings me laugh and tear.
She always making my whole day.
Leaving me with nothing to say
She's so famous among her crowds
With her talent that she's so proud.
She's the goddess of my dream.
A Untouchable queen.
With a dream like smile.
That make people scream.
Yet, she's cold as ice.
A burning sensation in my eyes.
She's the faint glow in the darkness
A small part of my happiness.
She's the word i can't describe
She gave me a nostalgic vibe.
Now it made me think.
Does she love me too? Am i good for her?
Even if you don't
I still be there.
2 responses
@bunnybon7 (50973)
• Holiday, Florida
14 Mar 10
oh that is very romantic. i liked it. i think you should give it to her.
and let her know how you feel. oh but perhaps you dont know her now. i see it says long ago. anyway, i thought it was quite good. btw, you need more friends dear, with your interests. so you get more response. otherwise you will get to thinking mylot is not fun. yet its quite a lot of fun when you get lots of friends and talk about what you like, believe me
@killerblowXIII (123)
• Philippines
15 Mar 10
well your right mylot is not that fun when you dun have many friends. And btw its not very long ago. Its been 1 year since i mad this poem. I just posted it here to share for mylotters. And also i still know her i still see her, dont think badly of me, im not a coward its just that i dont im not certain
@williamjisir (22819)
• China
23 May 10
Hello friend. It is a wonderful poem you have written that I enjoy. You are very talented in poem writing. You know, when one is in deep love with the beauty in his eyes, he can be a very good poet to begin with as lots of his inspiration comes from the real feeling in his deep heart. That is why this poem of yours is well written to me. I appreciate your sharing with us your wonderful poem. Happy posting.
