What's Wrong?
@abhi_bangal (5533)
Ahmednagar, India
April 14, 2010 8:48pm CST
I am a budding writer and trying to find my feet in this industry. I write blog posts, which are totally a personal thing. But my problem is rather different. I am earning through MyLot. I also write for Microworkers as the jobs are available. The other day I had written a 1000 word article in 4 hours and earned $4. The article was, of course, accepted. But when I applied for GetaFreelancer and did some writing jobs, I got the responses that some article contained structural errors otherwise, grammtically they were ok. I really found it hard to recognize how the mistakes happened. I am really disappointed with this. And I am losing on my efforts as well as money too. Please help me, what should I do to improve? Is there any such software that would help me in this regard. PLEASE RESPOND SOON. I REALLY NEED ALL YOUR HELP.
"There are some girls too, who do not like especially, the boys harassing them." And "Having your daughter in London boarding schools for girls at an early age might help parents in curbing their daughter’s behaviour going haywire." These two sentences are wrong - I am told. Please help me correct them.
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@AliceWonderly (70)
• United States
15 Apr 10
It's hard to tell what you mean. If you mean that all girls dislike being harassed, but some girls dislike it extremely, you might write: All girls dislike being harassed by boys, but some girls especially dislike it.
As far as controlling the behavior of young women, you might try: Putting your young daughter in a London boarding school might prevent her behavior from later going haywire. Writing both "curbing" and "haywire" is redundant. That is, it says the same thing twice. This means that you could say instead: To help curb your daughter's behavior, you could educate her in a girl's boarding school.
Most versions of the Word program will point out grammatical errors, and there are free knockoff versions(that are not quite as good)available on the web.
@Sunny0727 (53)
• China
15 Apr 10
your two example sentence make me a little misunderstanding.
for me,i will revised it as following :
1: there are some girls who don't like the boys harassing them.
2:putting your daughter in london boarding schools for grils at an early age which might help you corb your daughter's behavious going haywire.
it's only my personly opinion.
@allknowing (136446)
• India
15 Apr 10
Let me rewrite those sentences:
1."There are some girls who do not like boys harassing them".
Although you have just asked to reconstruct this sentence I would go a bit further and even refute your thinking inasmuch as I think all girls do not like boys harassing them. What made you think that only some girls[i][/i]do not like boys harassing them?
2. "Putting your daughter in the London Boarding School for Girls at an early age might help you curb your daughter's behaviour going haywire."
Here again I assume you are advising one mother who is in London suggesting to her that she puts her daughter in the London Boarding School for Girls which perhaps is the name of the boarding school you are recommending. However if it is a general advice for all mothers then the sentence would be:
"Putting girls in boarding schools for girls at an early age might help curb their behaviour going haywire"
