Wrote a short story

@ecaron (678)
Canada
March 17, 2012 1:20pm CST
I was half awake early this morning just lying in bed thinking about a story in my head and when I got up starting writing it down in my notebook before I forgot all the details. We all know the story of "Jack and Jill" who went up the hill to fetch a pail of water, well my story is a little take off on that one. It's a tragic love story but has a happy ending. I call it " Jack went up the hill" although I thought of another title, " Jack and Jill with a Twist" , what do you think? Anyway, I'll think I'll type the story into my word program on my computer and maybe make an e book out of it, who knows? It's too long to share with you all here, but if you'd like to read it pm me and maybe I can e mail you a copy of it. I read it to my friend who lives upstairs this morning and she thought it was interesting. Anyway, I'll try to fine tune it if it needs it. Yours thoughts on writing, My Lot friends!
2 responses
@Christoph56 (1504)
• Canada
17 Mar 12
I gotta say, I don't really like that title... it's far too direct, and that makes the people reading it feel a little dumber looking at it. I should ask though, are you aiming more towards children, or adults? Perhaps a name like, "The Tribulations of Jack" would work better.
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• India
28 Jun 12
It is very kind of you to want to share the short story you made. I think I am interested to know what kind of twist you made with the story. True, who knows, a lot of people might like the story. If your friends thought it is interesting , it think it is worth sharing it with others.