Thinking of Posting my Old Poems.

India
October 3, 2012 10:11am CST
There was a time when i was very alone. That time my broken heart was with me. That time my feelings went through my pen and became words.. Now i want to share those words. Maybe they are not so good.. I don't know whether people will like it or not.. Here is the first writing.. You'll Find Someone Else. Age of six He loved her so And everyday He'd let her know "I love you Grace" He'd say each day She'd just laugh And run away Till one day She turned around And sat with him One the playground "I'm sorry Chris I don't love you You'll find someone else Who loves you too" High school came They met again They laughed about The things back then They began to date And fell in love He got the girl That he'd dreamed of But when college came Everything changed They were apart With lives rearranged "We'll be fine Grace" But she had doubt She turned and said "It won't work out" "I'm sorry Chris I can't love you You'll find someone else Who loves you too" In their twenties They met again They laughed about The things back then He took her hand They began to dance Remembering Their old romance Two years later She became his wife They'd be together All of their life They went on a drive When it was no longer light They drove down the roads Of the starry night The music came on She started to sing He whispered, "Grace You're my everything" But they suddenly In one big flash Headlights shone As their car crashed He saw her laying Down on the ground He felt his tears Start rolling down "Grace..." he cried She took his hand "I have to leave... Please understand" "I love you so much It's always been true But you'll find someone else And you'll love again too" "No," he cried "It's always been you I don't want someone else I only want you" And there on that street Is where he cried Hugging his love As she slowly died....
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6 responses
@flapiz (23133)
• United Kingdom
8 Oct 12
Wow! This gave me goosebumps. It actually brought me close to tears. It's a very beautiful poem.
• India
8 Oct 12
Thanks you.. :)
3 Oct 12
Nicely written, you've done well to keep all the lines in all the verses a similar length, in many poems I've seen the lines get longer and longer. The poem conveys the emotions very well, I do hope that the sad ending is fictional, though broken hearts can often feel this way. You've got a couple of errors I presume it's with having to re-type the thing into mylot, just another 495 posts and you can use paste, I can't wait for that, I have a number of un-published items which need constructive feedback. I would happily read more, but I believe the mylot rules state there must be a discussion topic, so just be careful how you phrase it, I'd hate to miss out on more of these.
• India
3 Oct 12
Thanks for the compliments. And also thanks for the pointing the errors. I will make sure that it will not happen again. I will also look after the advice. Iam looking forward to read your un-published items.. :)
@williamjisir (22819)
• China
1 Nov 12
Thank you so much for sharing this touching poem with us. I was so sad while reading the last few lines. This is not an end I expect, but it was a feeling you had back to then. Yes? Anyway, I think that this is a well-written poem because it deeply moved me. When I was young, I also wrote some poems about my feelings back then. Now my diaries are all gone and I cannot remember what exactly was written there. Now I can not find any inspiration to write another poem of mine. Thanks again for the poem and enjoy writing.
@ARIES1973 (11426)
• Legaspi, Philippines
3 Nov 12
What a lovely poem! I'm glad i take time to read. This is really wonderful! Have a nice day!
@riyauro (6421)
• India
3 Oct 12
well i liked it very much and i would say these days i am reading lot of poems. Just and hour ago I read another long poem like yours from another mylotter and i loved it. So I guess there are some really creative poets around here on mylot. good work. Thanks for sharing and have a wonderful day ahead.
• India
3 Oct 12
Thank you very much for loving it. Iam not a poet. Just sometimes i write what my heart says. It will encourage me to share rest of the poems. :)
• Singapore
7 Nov 12
i love unique poems... i so love to write poems... may it short or long. poems just out of the box! :) nice one from yours... keep on posting!