Could This Be You?
By Jabo
@jaboUK (64354)
United Kingdom
September 12, 2015 3:08pm CST
My diet's going well today,
I've had no pies or fries,
If I can keep this up all day
I'll soon reduce in size.
As yet I have been really good,
No burger's passed my lips,
And neither have I eaten pud,
Nor chocolate nor chips.
And in this world of which I dream
Oh yes, I'm getting thin,
I don't partake of cakes and cream,
And bread stays in it's bin.
Oh well, I'd best get out of bed,
I've lain here far too long,
And if temptation rears it's head,
I'll tell it to begone.
Uh Oh - what's that gorgeous smell?
It's pizza with some cheese!
My hunger pangs I cannot quell,
Perhaps a small slice, please?
I know that what I'm eating's wrong,
I know it and I rue it,
Tomorrow I will prove I'm strong,
Yes, that's when I will do it.
*******************
Original poem by Jabo. Have you ever put off starting a diet?
This is just an experiment to see if rhymes can find an audience here.
Image from Pixabay.
33 people like this
34 responses
@crazyhorseladycx (39509)
• United States
12 Sep 15
ms. @jaboUK 's brilliant wit 'n a masterful way 'f puttin' words together. i jest adore 'er 'n 've been tryin' fer some time to get 'er to 've her collection published. others joined in 'n hopefully that'll be done sometime in the near future. the whole world needs to read 'em - they're jest that darned good!
4 people like this
@LadyDuck (471459)
• Switzerland
14 Sep 15
I applaud this new poem of yours that is funny and great as usual. I am also very good in dieting in my dreams... I should stop cooking, the smell of good food makes me hungry. Well, after all, I do not need to lose weight (but I do not want to gain!).
4 people like this
@jaboUK (64354)
• United Kingdom
30 Oct 16
@Daljinder Do you really? I'm the opposite - I'm fat around my middle.
1 person likes this
@Daljinder (23236)
• Bangalore, India
30 Oct 16
@jaboUK Um... I definitely want to gain some pounds
1 person likes this
@Tampa_girl7 (50262)
• United States
12 Sep 15
Love your poem. It would certainly be hard to resist pizza
4 people like this
@jaboUK (64354)
• United Kingdom
12 Sep 15
@Tampa-girl7 Actually, don't tell anyone, but I don't like pizza! It just fitted into the verse
3 people like this
@Rosekitty (19368)
• San Marcos, Texas
14 Sep 15
I do it every day..too many tasty food out there and i love pizza too..oh well guess i will wait till next month
3 people like this
@Rosekitty (19368)
• San Marcos, Texas
14 Sep 15
@jaboUK i know it is a shame..and now look at me getting hungry..hahah
3 people like this
@jaboUK (64354)
• United Kingdom
14 Sep 15
@Rosekitty I wonder why all the foods that are bad for you always taste so good . Yes tomorrow - next month - whenever!
3 people like this
@celticeagle (167015)
• Boise, Idaho
13 Sep 15
What a cute poem! So true too. I don't know how many times I've done that. A lot of diet truths came to mind reading it. Thanks for sharing this with us.
3 people like this
@jaboUK (64354)
• United Kingdom
13 Sep 15
@celticeagle Yes, I wrote it from experience! I'm glad that you can relate to it too. I'm so pleased you like this, thank you.
2 people like this
@allknowing (136541)
• India
14 Sep 15
You have been well accepted as can be seen from the responses you received for your introduction. It is not the rhymes but your posts per se are well received. So no matter what you post there will be many who will read them.
Nice poem. I like to write too and may be I shall post one of mine.
3 people like this
@allknowing (136541)
• India
14 Sep 15
@jaboUK I have just posted one
The best part of my life was the days I spent in my school and here is a poem as testimony SCHOOL TIMES Destiny takes us we know not where But we carry our...
2 people like this
@jaboUK (64354)
• United Kingdom
14 Sep 15
@allknowing I've read it now and like it a lot
3 people like this
@GreatMartin (23672)
• Ft. Lauderdale, Florida
14 Sep 15
With my birthday coming up I gave myself a year to get in fighting (EATING!) shape--I have lost 32 pounds in 9 months--going for 10 more (just in case weight!) and then when I reach my 20th Leap Year birthday I am NEVER going on a diet again!!
Yes! Yes! A poem!!
3 people like this
@jaboUK (64354)
• United Kingdom
14 Sep 15
@GreatMartin - Wow, you've done really well in losing all that weight. Thanks for sending me an invite to your birthday, bless you, but it ain't gonna happen that I will be ble to attend , much as I'd like to.
1 person likes this
@sprinklesare4winners (531)
• Avenel, New Jersey
13 Sep 15
oh yeah. and once you fall off the wagon, its so hard to get back on again! currently experiencing this now :(
4 people like this
@sueznewz2 (10409)
• Alicante, Spain
12 Sep 15
You'll always have a fan in me @jabo.... I love the poem...and I hope folks on here will too...
4 people like this
@VivaLaDani13 (60794)
• Perth, Australia
30 Oct 16
@jaboUK lol classic! Not sure if this poem made me want to be good and eat fruit or grab some pizza lol
2 people like this
@jaboUK (64354)
• United Kingdom
30 Oct 16
@Daljinder @VivaLaDani13 Yes, the poem could work either way.
2 people like this
@VivaLaDani13 (60794)
• Perth, Australia
31 Oct 16
@Daljinder LOL a bird? I ate cereal instead haha
1 person likes this
@Daljinder (23236)
• Bangalore, India
30 Oct 16
@VivaLaDani13 Definitely grab a pizza I am not sure if dieting is the problem with you. You eat like a bird anyway
1 person likes this
@Daljinder (23236)
• Bangalore, India
30 Oct 16
@jaboUK Had a little nostalgia hit me along with a pang of sadness reading marcy's comments all over this post. Didn't feel like she is gone reading those but ... shrug..,
1 person likes this
@pahak627 (4558)
• Philippines
3 Oct 15
I like your poem, Jabo. I'm on a diet too. Wish I could attain the normal level for my cholesterol, sugar and creatinine. I'm on a no meat and less sugar diet right now and more water. We filipinos eat rice 3 x a day. And now I cut the rice too. I only eat rice during lunch time. Hope I can attain my goal.
2 people like this
@rebelann (112875)
• El Paso, Texas
15 Sep 15
I've been on the same diet most of my life, it's the seefood diet ..... I seefood I eat if I like it.
Well, I guess I am kinda on a diet, I only eat foods that are organic, don't want those chemicals used on some foods in my body or the hormones used on livestock either.
2 people like this
@MarshaMusselman (38865)
• Midland, Michigan
27 Sep 15
If your poetry doesn't find an audience here, something is wrong with those people. You done good once more. I'd have added a word or two on the line about chocolate and chips. Like maybe just 'any' before chips would match the others better.
I could read your poems all the day long. Can't wait until your daughter puts them all into a book. Maybe by then, you'll be telling stories that hook together with your poetry. Now wouldn't that be the cat's meaow?
2 people like this
@jaboUK (64354)
• United Kingdom
27 Sep 15
@MarshaMusselman Thanks Marsha, your comments are always so helpful.
This poem did go down ok, and I've done another since, so perhaps they don't mind poems too much here.
2 people like this