Poem#2 (From the upcoming book 'Hybrid Sanity')
@Juliothemadpoet (90)
Bangalore, India
December 1, 2015 11:41am CST
‘The joy of falls’
Grab the falls and fall in them head first
just to get ourselves up,
even more tired,
heavier and more still in the thoughts
and the dreams had in the happy moments
that will not take our future sadness
that proves what is fake and approves the real will.
Stay in the ground just for the sake and joy of it.
Just to admire the whole that we miss.
That is forgotten when all we have is the nothing that fills us up
and turns our bodies hollow from the inside out,
full in the inside,
ready to admire the stars with seas in the eyes
without knowing where to look,
without destinations to look for.
Ok, this is one of the 10 poems that I am going to put on my lot, from the book Hybrid Sanity, that is already finished and ready, for you guys give your opinion about it and have a 'preview' of it, however, I must say that I will give free copies to some people (Surprise!) but only after or in the day of the official publication.
I will be waiting for your brutally sincere opinion about the poem. (Be as truthful as impossible. :) )
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@oneoveralpha (434)
• Brookville, Pennsylvania
2 Dec 15
I'm terrible at critiquing poetry. With that said, I thought it was nice. :D
@Juliothemadpoet (90)
• Bangalore, India
3 Dec 15
Hahaha, thanks.
You are terrible at giving critics to poetry, but if it was nice to you, it's something, and I really appreciated it.
Allow me to ask, was there something in specific that you liked about this poem?
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@oneoveralpha (434)
• Brookville, Pennsylvania
3 Dec 15
@Juliothemadpoet The last two lines, I guess, connected with me the most.
@Juliothemadpoet (90)
• Bangalore, India
4 Dec 15
@oneoveralpha Wow, the punch line. Nice. That's says a lot.
Thanks for the critics. They where really valuable.
And if you want to practice your poetic critic skills, I have a lot of books waiting for ratings.
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