My attempt at poetry - A Dream came True!

@Scindhia (1906)
India
January 6, 2016 12:16am CST
I'm interested in reading poetry. Now I have slowly started exploring my writing skills as well. This is how my attempt turned out I was waiting for a long time To meet a respectable man A gentle man of manners and looks With a bold and joyful heart, Undoubtedly in most good books And believes in a positive start With whom I can cross the threshold of wedding Without the fear of boredom With whom my life would be so blissful That it would become wholesome A man who knows no boundaries A man who likes a woman as she is A man who doesn't demand my legs be waxed A man who doesn't expect his house be fixed A man who knows I'm a daddy's girl And in his warmth makes my toes curl A man who is not afraid to call my mom as his A man who refers to my sister as sis A man whose deeds everyone wants to hear A man who spreads love and good cheer To marry such a man was a dream A wistful flash, no doubt the other gender's cream But then it happened just like that One phone call and I was flat Madly, deeply, truly in love To this day my happiness, to you I owe Never till now did I feel blue A happy dream you are, that finally came true!
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@japneet20 (249)
• New Delhi, India
6 Jan 16
I enjoyed it
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@Scindhia (1906)
• India
11 Jan 16
Thank you.
@jaboUK (64354)
• United Kingdom
6 Jan 16
I enjoyed your poem, but it would make it easier to read if you broke it up into verses, with a space between them. A solid block of text is a bit off-putting. I hope you don't mind my saying so, but I do poetry myself and know that way works better
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@Scindhia (1906)
• India
6 Jan 16
I focused only on words this time. You are right. Thanks for the suggestion :)
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@jstory07 (141298)
• Roseburg, Oregon
6 Jan 16
Your attempt at poetry was very good.;
@Scindhia (1906)
• India
6 Jan 16
Thank You :)
@hiru84 (942)
• Malaysia
6 Jan 16
I enjoyed your poem. If you practice more you will be a professional poet soon.
@Scindhia (1906)
• India
6 Jan 16
Wow! Thank you :)
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@Daljinder (23236)
• Bangalore, India
1 Feb 16
Found your dream husband or boyfriend??? Anyways I enjoyed it very much...Good job!! P. S. And I want a man like the one mentioned in the poetry too.......