Untitled Old Poem

@simplfred (20641)
Philippines
January 25, 2019 7:33am CST
He swims at the foggy white river His owned deep canal Salty water overflowed From his two oblong shape elfin stars Mostly, a not so interesting water place But he decided to be more creative Like how the word pain Become more artistic to him He wanted this stream To resembles the plain sky An ocean alike But he just hated the cerulean color He loves the literal meaning of the curvy rainbow That'll be definitely an attractive design But knowing blue still part of it He has dumped the colorful scheme Like how reality murdered his Every majestic dream Success is not all about hard work Hardwork is an overrated word for success The storm smashes what he has sowed The sun burned his ice of effort Luck, also thinner than needles And he is not the chosen one Love is just a word for the few And every of it added to his Melancholic river Now, he thinks of the right Amazing color that surely will fit That's when a scarlet embers entered To his imaginative thoughts The tempting apple of Eve will surely Fly him to other dimensions Where he won't care anymore For the cycle of pain Just one last sting Yes, a reddish river seems An amazing art So he is ready now To shed liquefied rubies from his skin But something stops His ambitious attempt Abruptly, he thinks of vermilion As the color of beautiful flowers Red as roses Red as heart Then, a sudden very long sighed By then, he ascended from his canal To give life Another chance... 12/13/2016 Mysterious Aries Note: Mysterious Aries is Simplfred here in Mylot or Frederick Espiritu... It's me...
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4 responses
• Philippines
26 Jan 19
Very nice poem...
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@simplfred (20641)
• Philippines
26 Jan 19
Thank you so much for your feedback.
• Philippines
26 Jan 19
@simplfred no problem.. hoping to read more poems you made..
• Daytona Beach, Florida
25 Jan 19
That is wonderfully written, I'm curious how you were able to make the line spacings stick true, I seem to be having issues with that in some of my posts and a few users have complained about things being difficult to read.
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@simplfred (20641)
• Philippines
25 Jan 19
Thank you, my friend. I just copied this from my work and it was posted like that. I'm sorry I can't help you with your query.
@ilocosboy (45156)
• Philippines
26 Jan 19
This is good poem. But as I read the your poem you can also be write poem for children.
@Sheali (7461)
• India
25 Jan 19
This is so nice.. Good job
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@simplfred (20641)
• Philippines
25 Jan 19
Thank you so much for the positive feedback.
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