Help correct my poem 1
@sweetshayens (328)
November 3, 2020 1:33am CST
Hello mylotters, would you please recheck my poem below?
If you find grammar errors or weird sentences, please give some words suggestion :-)
I'm sprawling on the frozen land,
As the red twilight set up on the horizon
I'm shrouded in mega fog,
While the sun stepping down into the darkness
I'm a man that's missing my night moon…
Here I'm…
Remembering you…as always I did,
To the time we cohered to form a spring flower
In the blooming season, in the tender air
Inch by inch…
Universal's blessing brings you
Forming you to its plenary imaginary
You come in a floral scent
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