Please correct my poem 2
@sweetshayens (328)
November 3, 2020 1:39am CST
Hello mylotters, this is my poem about guy who's missing his girl.
Would you please check its grammar? If you find any weird sentences, please give some words suggestion :-)
You're still the same,
As that bright and silky morning
When the clarity of the universe,
Welcoming two lovebirds making love
Here I'm…
Remembering you
To the touch of your lips,
That burned my sweat
I suffered indescribable surge
My soul was lost in lust
In the scent of Caledonian
The terrace on the hill became our nirvana
Witnessed about us,
Chimed in porcelain love
In the mist of eternal love
As if it was forever…
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