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Hi all, would you please recheck my poem below? If you find some grammar error, please give any suggestion words :-) In the scent of Caledonian The terrace on the hill became our nirvana Witnessed about us, Chimed in porcelain love In the mist of eternal love As if it was forever… Then we came… Gasped in hopeless breath You laid down in my arms But in sadness and gloomy afternoon To face that our time was ended… Here I'm… With my longing words In my hindered lure, Embrace your faded imaginary Hoping it will never end… Image credit: pixabay