poetry: give your best shot...here's a taste of mine
By ninableu
@ninableu (19)
United States
December 15, 2006 3:18am CST
THE TRUTH
Disease-infected, scaly-skinned, blistering I roam
but I am beautiful to the naked eye
Only the well-trained can see inside me
These cells tremble with fear of deterioration
but still you try to "get at me"
Honey, dont let me release this sickness on you
your too young and fragile to handle the truth
Everything is everything but what it seems
I am a mirage of appearances to you
In the desert you will thrist for water
and I will be standing before you like quicksand
you cant appreciate what I am
Natural forces are not always pleasant
but always necessary and true
And the truth is you want a lie to lie to every night
and if I'm right....
You want the lie to lie to you to
but only if she smiles with a wicked twinkle in her eye
Then she's just pretending, right?
You'll rationalize until all reason is gone
So I will make it plain and simple for you
I AM NOT THE DISEASE FOR YOU
Pick another one cuz I'm through
with conniving my way into bloodstreams and
mental pattern of the few...I POSSESS
I cant take life anymore
sleep to dream, but dream to wake
but if and when you do...conquer the disease that is you
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2 responses
@lena2000 (2392)
• Belgium
15 Dec 06
I CAN'T DO THIS,
I CAN'T WAIT,
FOR WAITING FOR YOUR LOVE,
IS MAKING ME HATE,
EVERYTHING ABOUT MYSELF,
EVERYTHING I HAD,
WAITING FOR 3 WORDS FROM YOU,
IS MAKING ME GO MAD,
SO, ETERNALLY I'LL LOVE YOU,
BUT, ALAS, I HAVE TO GO,
AS MY SORROW AND MY PAIN,
HAVE TAKEN ME TO GOD'S FOE,
I HAVE SEEN MY FINAL SUNSET,
I HAVE HAD MY FINAL KISS,
SO OFF I DRIFT, FROM YOUR ARMS,
INTO ETERNAL BLISS!!
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@deshabhishek007 (919)
• India
15 Dec 06
Little Brown Baby
by Paul Laurence Dunbar
Little brown baby wif spa'klin' eyes,
Come to yo' pappy an' set on his knee.
What you been doin', suh—makin' san' pies?
Look at dat bib—you's ez du'ty ez me.
Look at dat mouf—dat's merlasses, I bet;
Come hyeah, Maria, an' wipe off his han's.
Bees gwine to ketch you an' eat you up yit,
Bein' so sticky an sweet—goodness lan's!
Little brown baby wif spa'klin' eyes,
Who's pappy's darlin' an' who's pappy's chile?
Who is it all de day nevah once tries
Fu' to be cross, er once loses dat smile?
Whah did you git dem teef? My, you's a scamp!
Whah did dat dimple come f'om in yo' chin?
Pappy do' know you—I b'lieves you's a tramp;
Mammy, dis hyeah's some ol' straggler got in!
Let's th'ow him outen de do' in de san',
We do' want stragglers a-layin' 'roun' hyeah;
Let's gin him 'way to de big buggah-man;
I know he's hidin' erroun' hyeah right neah.
Buggah-man, buggah-man, come in de do',
Hyeah's a bad boy you kin have fu' to eat.
Mammy an' Pappy do' want him no mo',
Swaller him down f'om his haid to his feet!
Dah, now, I t'ought dat you'd hug me up close.
Go back, ol buggah', you sha'n't have dis boy.
He ain't no tramp, ner no straggler, of co'se;
He's pappy's pa'dner an' palymate an' joy.
Come to you' pallet now—go to yo' res';
Wisht you could allus know ease an' cleah skies;
Wisht you could stay jes' a chile on my breas'—
Little brown baby wif' spa'klin' eyes!
@axe_effect (799)
• Philippines
15 Dec 06
comments/tips;
please try to check your syllables to make the poem better,
look for a better word that bests describes your subject,
try to keep your poem focused on the subject.
thanks..
