Poem I wrote - discuss, add your own, enjoy
By kellahinx
@kellahinx (370)
United States
December 19, 2006 4:42pm CST
Walking in the Rain
Running, being beaten by the rain
He upsets an unwanted, cast-aside scrap
Which flips and squirms in pain
And slips down the grate into crap
Travels and tumbles with impact
And falls to the ocean floor
To become a mere artifact
For all but humanity to ignore
Millions of moons to come
Some excavator will unload
That priceless scrap that came from
The forgotten man, walking down the road.
The man still presses onward
The rain harsh against his face
Pulling his jacket forward
Causing sight of others to erase
A young lady walking by
Could endure no more of this
Ran home and began to cry
For every ignore and dismiss
She killed herself that night
After that one final straw
Of the man who didn't give hindsight
To that woman that he saw.
That same man, now several paces ahead
Releases the bottle from his hand
Which falls quick as if were dead
Shattering as he planned
Hours from now a courier on this street
Will puncture his tire on a shard
Will lose control and will unseat
Plunging fast and hard
Cars brake and swerve
Killing, but cause untold
Of the man's nerve
To throw his bottle in the road.
Every action of this man
Had a consequence
Although not done in plan
Or meant in offense
He will never know
If the truth be told
What others will undergo
Because he walked down the road.
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4 responses
@Adversa (406)
• Australia
27 Dec 06
Thats fairly good, do you write poetry profesionally? If you dont then you probably could. maybe send a few into the newspaer or something (I dont know how it works theses days).
Can I please have your permision to post that in a forum I belong to, I think some of the other members would apreciate that as much as I did. I would of course give you full credit for its creation.
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@kellahinx (370)
• United States
27 Dec 06
I don't write professionally, but I have taken a couple courses on poetry writing.
you could share it, that is fine. I am glad you enjoyed it so much.
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@MadameLaCouyan (149)
• United States
26 Dec 06
I really like this poem! Amazing how we don't really realize that little things we do can really affect those around us and even millenia to come. Human arrogance once again.
I think I'll share one as well. It's short but I like it.
Twilight Flight
Soft glows bloom neath darkened bower...
Tiny wings flutter to nearby flower...
Magick weaves an enchanting spell...
Fairy whispers only trees could tell...
Pale moon high on starlit night...
Goddess joins in the fairy flight...
Dancing, dancing til dawn is near...
Escaping laughter is all we hear...
@kellahinx (370)
• United States
26 Dec 06
I like your poem also. It creates a really good image. that is the great thing about poetry: you can say a lot without having to use so many words...
thanks for your response!
@brandonknies (305)
• United States
6 Jan 07
that is a very nice poem. i like it. i also write poetry. had one published, and plan on getting more. you should see about that. i think you could get published :)
@brandonknies (305)
• United States
6 Jan 07
as we sit here, thougts untold,
reflecting on a worlds so cold.
a world so empty, full of hate.
sitting still, pondering fate.
wondering where life shall lead.
the mouth of greed our pockets feed.
we live to earn, and earn to live,
yet all the money we shall give.
give to those of power and wealth
to gain some land, and keep our health
the money gained so soon is lost.
but to live, such is the cost.