I have decided.....
By crazynurse
@crazynurse (7482)
United States
July 24, 2007 1:37pm CST
I have decided that I want to be a poet. I have written my first masterpiece. (I refuse to follow the path of many and just copy/paste a piece of poetry from the internet). Tell me what you think of my first piece of work? Do you think I could get it published? What skills do I need to hone? All suggestions and constructive criticism welcomed!! *wink*
(Feel free to add a second verse if you'd like!)
Honor (by: Crazynurse)
My honor is worth more than a penny.
Honor? Some folks haven't any!
My honor is worth more than a cent.
Some folks idea of honor is quite bent.
I come to mylot and follow the rules.
Some come to mylot to grovel like fools.
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17 responses
@sunshinecup (7871)
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25 Jul 07
Copy n paste other's work
Is to be a low life jerk.
I don't know, I am new to this whole poetry thing, so I gave it a shot.
I do like what you have so much better!!!
@sunshinecup (7871)
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25 Jul 07
Copy n paste other's work
Is how to be a low life jerk.
First cup of coffee, *sigh*
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@maryannemax (12156)
• Sweden
25 Jul 07
that's a pretty start for you. you have the heart for writing poetries so continue it. don't let it go away from you just like i did. i had this passion for writing poems, too when i was still in highschool. but i lost interest on it and it went out of my system. now, whenever i try to start one, i just can't find the right words to say. maybe the passion had left me since i did not nurture it years ago.
and for you, nice work crazynurse. nice rhymes and nice word counts. you can also try free verse poems. no need for rhymes. but i think word counts are still necessary.
keep it up!
anne
@JoyfulOne (6232)
• United States
24 Jul 07
Hmmmmmm, looks like you've got a good start there. Here's a possible second verse, lol:
Others, they write,
and come out 'not bright',
their words give me bad dreams
all through the night.
Crazynurse is my Mylot name
nobody else has one and the same.
I could write here all day
and never get fame.
The discussions I start,
are crazy and fun,
They've always a twist
and sometimes a pun.
Yes my honor is worth
far more than a cent,
I could type here all day
and yet never 'make rent.'
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@crazynurse (7482)
• United States
24 Jul 07
Wow Joyful, I wish I had your way with words! Great job!
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@JoyfulOne (6232)
• United States
24 Jul 07
Aw, thanks. I've always had a love of messin' with words ever since I was a kid. I love working with rhyme & meter, it's that Haiku stuff I can't seem to do, hahaha.
@inked4life (4224)
• United States
24 Jul 07
Dull discussions make my eyes become glazed
Then I see this great poem, I am amazed
Honor is a word seldom heard or used anymore
People are treated like dirt on a bathroom floor
Good members are suspended, cancelled, and dissed
I sometimes leave here and feel I should get p!ssed
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@crazynurse (7482)
• United States
24 Jul 07
Great second verse inked!!! I so appreciate your efforts!
@Grandmaof2 (7579)
• Canada
25 Jul 07
To come to myLot just for the money
Can stop the game that's just not funny.
I'm here to make friends and learn a few things,
Moneys'Ok but friends Love and laughter myLot brings.
Sit back relax and put down your purse,
This isn't about money it's about crazynurse.
The End.
Wow hows that for team work, you and I not bad yeh ? hehehe
Take care...
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@crazynurse (7482)
• United States
25 Jul 07
That was incredible Grandma!!! "Sit back relax and put down your purse..." I love it! Kudos!
@teapotmommommerced (10359)
• United States
25 Jul 07
I am not an expert of poetry but I liked it. LOL
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@missjackie (1357)
• Ypsilanti, Michigan
24 Jul 07
Congratulations on becoming a poet! :) I have been writing poetry since I was about 14 years old (now 27). It can be really relaxing to just write a poem and express what I feel that very moment.
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@beccacoward (525)
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24 Jul 07
That made me giggle, it's very witty (and well done on the rhyming thing, I'm not so good at that!) - more of these poems of yours, please! x
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@worldwise1 (14885)
• United States
24 Jul 07
Your poem is pretty good, crazynurse. I don't think you need to add anything to it. Your point is delivered just as it is.
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@carmelanirel (20942)
• United States
24 Jul 07
I like it and stand with you on that.
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@Vangakanuts11 (20)
• United States
25 Jul 07
If that is your first piece of work, I will say that you are heading somewhere. poetry is about putting on paper your feelings, experiences, dreams, and such as you live life everyday. I started writing poems when I was 14. I simply put my thoughts and observations on paper as they occur, then I review that piece of writing after say a week or so, to see if it still makes sense to me. If it still does, I put it in a 'final draft' and share it with my friends. I also post my poems in websites such as Poetry.com, poetry4Jesus.com, and such, which can sometime reward you for you work or publish it. You got a great start and keep going!!!!
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@Lydia1901 (16351)
• United States
29 Jul 07
Well, this is not bad a tall if this is your first poem. I like it and I think you are going to make a great poet.
@ajrox1810 (992)
• India
25 Jul 07
Well i appreciate your poetry.One Good thing is that they have a modern touch in them and THEY ARE NOT ROMANTIC!Your poems are a little bit Hip-Hop style which is the most popular nowadays.
