Broken Hearts: A Poem.
By Virginians
@Virginians (440)
United States
November 16, 2006 9:47pm CST
Just a poem that I've written, it turned out rather good. So I thought I would go ahead and share it with everyone. Most of my own friends think it's depressing, and that it's a plea for attention. I wish they'd learn to read the context rather than just the words. The basic jist of the poem is, don't let a broken heart keep you from trusting people in the future. Or you're going to miss out on something that could be quite beautiful.
The pieces are jagged
Tearing into self-esteem
Broken fragments of dreams
Smashed desires
Tiny slivers of what could have been
When a broken heart guides you
It cuts not only your soul
But those who try to come near
Never let the past hurts
Ruin what could happen tomorrow
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14 responses
@rawpoet (2046)
• United States
17 Nov 06
Thank you for sharing your poem. I'm a published poet myself, and nobody should be telling you it's a plea for attention. Poetry comes from the heart.
I write poetry that doesn't even connect to me at times. I go for the shock factor. That's why I'm rawpoet. :-)
@Virginians (440)
• United States
17 Nov 06
Thank you for responding, RawPoet! The shock factor can be a lot of fun. Though in my case it tends to lead to more trouble, and negative whining from others than I'd care to have to listen to. ^_^
@achyuta (2851)
• United States
17 Nov 06
Very good poem. It show the depth in your thoughts.
Here is one of my own.
Be yourself
I aspired to reclaim the craft of Shakespeare,,
But my plays were far too mediocre.
I wished i were as buoyant as Archimedes,
But i was weak in principles of Physics.
I desired to emulate the gallops of Tennyson,
But could not toy with words in unison.
I tried to immitate the magic of Da Vinci,
But my paintings were horrible to see.
I dreamt to relive the heroics of Napoleon,
But it was beyond the realms of proposition.
Finally, i hoped i were "me",
Thank God, i did not try to be Thee.
cheers
@kaspyv (1011)
• United States
17 Nov 06
great poem! you should post it on poetry.com...I write poetry too and have all mine copywrited and posted there.
@rawpoet (2046)
• United States
17 Nov 06
I don't know how long you've been publishing poetry on poetry.com, but be careful. It's a scam.
www.fanstory.com is a wonderful place to share your work, get reviews, help needed, and published in online ezines, and real life magazines if people recognize your work as being good. Check it out sometime.
@Virginians (440)
• United States
17 Nov 06
Thanks, I never cared much for poetry.com though. There's something about people making money off of other people's poems that just bothers me. Sure they say that people win contests for their poetry, and I did win their Haiku contest once, got myself a mouse pad. But, I'd rather not line their pockets with my years of emotions, and thoughtful musings.
@baldingeagle69 (749)
• United States
17 Nov 06
That is a good poem. What I got out of it, was don't let the past impede the future. Kinda something I need to learn. I think alot of people will just read the first few lines and see it as an attempt at attention. If you sit back and reread it you should get the message. I like the "tiny slivers of what could have been" line. It describes alot of what I am putting myself through at this time.
@Virginians (440)
• United States
17 Nov 06
Far too many of us have gone through that same thing, which is part of what inspired me to write the poem. No matter how hard it may seem, no matter just how deeply we may try to fall into the pits of despair and depression. There is always something that can be done, there is always something waiting just around the corner. A light of hope, a ray of truth, another chance at love. If you keep yourself in the past, the future will move on without you- then you really will be stuck.
@hariharbhat (1312)
• India
20 Dec 06
Forget the past
Learn to Live
The Future is Great
Have the hopes
Hopes would lead
Make you Forget
The past Bitter
This at the End
Heal the Broken Heart.
@birthlady (5609)
• United States
17 Nov 06
I think your poem is very good. Sometimes real expression is embarrassing to others who don't know their own hearts. Bravo! Write on!!!!
@Virginians (440)
• United States
17 Nov 06
Thank you, and you're quite right about that. It takes a stronger person to look within themselves first. Something most people no longer care to try.
@Virginians (440)
• United States
17 Nov 06
I look forward to getting a chance to read them sometime!
@Ally_Angel (423)
• New Zealand
18 Dec 06
This is a really good poem you have written there Virginians. I also write poetry. Keep it up. You are very good.
@axxepsonavane (318)
•
17 Nov 06
NO
IT IS GOOD...
MAY BE U R A DEPRESSION WRITER.
MY GIRLFRIEND IS ALSO ONE OF THEM N I THINK U PEOPLE ROCK......
@Virginians (440)
• United States
17 Nov 06
Thank you for your comment, I do appreciate it. I did go through a period of writing only depressing subjects. But I do not consider this to be one of those. It's not about something depressing, it's about finding that light and moving on with your life, knowing that there is love out there even after a hard break up.
@Virginians (440)
• United States
17 Nov 06
Thank you, and yes, you're quite right about that. The most important thing is to be able to express our feelings, and release those pent up thoughts that fester if kept silent for too long.
@anjalisk2005 (1492)
• India
20 Dec 06
your poem is very touching but make a little change in the last but one line.
'Never let the past hurts'
make it into
never let the past hurt
or
never let the pasts hurt
@aurelian125 (25)
• Romania
20 Dec 06
i think the poem means that u really loved him\her ! it is rather good !! i hope u don t mind that i will copy it and share it with my friends!!
