I need feedback!
By Nebel23
@Nebel23 (46)
Chile
December 11, 2011 10:28pm CST
I wrote a poem and I intend to give it away, so I want it to be nice :)
Title: How much you mean to me.
I could skip a heartbeat, and I would survive,
I could be in a car crash, and still be alive.
The clouds could fall out of the sky,
The oceans could disappear, and all turn dry.
These things in life are all bad I know,
but there's far worse things,
I just thought you should know.
Life would not be the same without someone like you,
You're there when I need you to help me through.
Through the good times and through the bad,
Be them happy, or be them sad.
I don't have to be with you, to know you're there,
We don't have to see each other, to know that we care.
We could be apart for years upon end,
and still remain the best of friends.
Life goes on, and people change,
And through it all, our friendship shall remain the same.
That's such as a life, and how things come to be.
I just thought you should know,
How much you mean to me.
Thank you !
3 responses
@jsmalong (109)
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12 Dec 11
I remember writing poems when I was in high school. I still have them today in my personal files. I do read them once in a while and everytime I do, it gives me a nice feeling. I like your poem which is about friendship. Keep on writing and sharing them to others.
@JER616 (545)
• Philippines
12 Dec 11
Suggestion:
I could skip a heartbeat, and I would survive;
I could be in a car crash, and still be alive.
The clouds and stars could fall out of the sky,
The oceans may disappear and all run dry,
These things in life are all bad I know,
but there are far worse things you may never know.
Life won't be the same without someone like you;
You're there when I need help to get me through.
In good times and in bad, be happy, or be sad,
Be near or be far, you're the reason I am glad.
I don't have to be with you, to know you're there,
We don't have to see each other, to know that we care.
We could be apart from years upon end,
And still remain the best of friends.
Life goes on, people and everything change,
And through it all, our friendship unchanged.
That's such a life, and how things come to be,
Yet through it all, it's you and me.
Hope you like this enhancement.
