The first Poem

Budennovsk, Russian Federation
January 5, 2016 5:01am CST
The previous Poem was a challenge from @Jessicalynnt. It gave me impetus and i wrote one more. It took me a couple of hours. I like it. Son asks his father to tell him about Russia. "Daddy, Daddy, what is Russia? It's a country or a lake? Do you know at least one Russian? Answer questions that I make!" "Listen, son, I'll tell your ears, Hope you won't get any fears. Russia has the largest square, Many rivers, mountains, lakes, In the forest lives a bear, In the marshes live some snakes. Nine time zones the country covers, Lots of oil and gas in it, Many climate types discovers... Are you listening? Take a seat. Slavic tribes - in the beginning, Stalin, Putin - in the end, Tsars and monarchs - in the middle, Study History, my friend. Have you seen some books on shelves, Grandpa used to read a lot? Neither goblins, nor kind elves Live in pattern of the plot. Dostoevsky, War and Peace Teach philosophy and life. Mental power will increase, Books can help to find good wife. That is all for you, so far. Hope you've learnt something today. Now, my son, go to my car, Bring us ball for football play!"
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35 responses
@jaboUK (64354)
• United Kingdom
5 Jan 16
This is great - very well done. I really enjoyed reading it, and as MALUSE says, it must be especially difficult when it's not your first language. Thanks @MALUSE for suggesting this, and bringing it to my attention. I'll suggest it to some of my friends as well - don't worry I can see who you've already sent it to, so nobody will get it twice.
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@jaboUK (64354)
• United Kingdom
5 Jan 16
@DaddyEvil If someone has already suggested it - it says 'sent' by their name. So it's impossible for someone to receive multiple suggestions for the same post.
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@DaddyEvil (137501)
• United States
5 Jan 16
Thank you for the suggestion, Janet! This was a very nice find! I do have a question for you, though. How do you know who Maluse already suggested this thread to? Never mind! I selected a few more people and suggested something for the fourth time in almost five months. I do hope all of them will like this, too!
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@sueznewz2 (10409)
• Alicante, Spain
5 Jan 16
thanks janet... well worth a read....
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@owlwings (43910)
• Cambridge, England
5 Jan 16
To describe the largest country in the world in 5 verses, 20 lines is quite a challenge. To do so in a language which is not your own and in a metre which immediately conjures up a melody which is quite definitely Russian in character (memories of the Red Army Ensemble and massed balalaikas here!), is nothing short of amazing! Congratulations! Pozdravleniya!
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• Budennovsk, Russian Federation
6 Jan 16
thank you. it is very kind of you
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@RasmaSandra (80659)
• Daytona Beach, Florida
8 Jan 16
@TypicalRussian Oh, living next door to Russia in Latvia I really enjoyed your poem. It is so descriptive and enjoyable. I nice way to tell someone about the huge country that is Russia. Loved this.
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• Budennovsk, Russian Federation
9 Jan 16
@RasmaSandra thank you. I will try to make you feeling glad more often
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@inertia4 (27960)
• United States
5 Jan 16
This is a wonderful poem. About learning and reading. I like this. And it has information in it as well. Well done.
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@inertia4 (27960)
• United States
6 Jan 16
@TypicalRussian You're welcome. Keep up the good work.
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• Budennovsk, Russian Federation
6 Jan 16
thank you. i am glad you like it.
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@marlina (154131)
• Canada
5 Jan 16
@TypicalRussian, First, my congratulations for a job well done. You are braver than me, I have yet to write a poem in English, my first language is French. I guess eventually I will take the plunge. Here is video to honor your country.
The National Anthem of the Russian Federation (Russian: ??????????????? ???? ?????????? ?????????, "Gosudarstvenny Gimn Rossiyskoy Federatsii") is the nation...
• Budennovsk, Russian Federation
6 Jan 16
thank you. what a pleasant thing! to tell you the truth, i thought of the rhyming dialogue that would mention not only positive sides of the country. but for the beginning i chose to say some positive words
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@bluesa (15022)
• Johannesburg, South Africa
5 Jan 16
@TypicalRussian , great poem. I did not know Russia had nine time zones or snakes! @jaboUK thank you for suggesting this poem.
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• Budennovsk, Russian Federation
6 Jan 16
thank you for your respnse. i appreciate that. i will try to work more on writing
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@WorDazza (15830)
• Manchester, England
5 Jan 16
I can only echo the praise from everyone else. An entertaining and informative read. Glad Dostoevsky got a mention. Crime and punishment has got be one of the greatest novels ever written.
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@xFiacre (13123)
• Ireland
5 Jan 16
@wordazza Amen to your thoughts on Crime and Punishment - I have read it regularly since I was seventeen and continue to do so. magnificent.
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• Budennovsk, Russian Federation
6 Jan 16
thank you. his philosophy and psychology really touches. i am reading now the last pages of Brothers Karamazovs (his last novel) and later i will write a post about it.
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@WorDazza (15830)
• Manchester, England
6 Jan 16
@TypicalRussian I have Brothers Karamazov sat in my book case at home. I'll read it at some point in the next few months.
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@celticeagle (168171)
• Boise, Idaho
6 Jan 16
Quite an undertaking and you did well. Enjoyed reading it.
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@celticeagle (168171)
• Boise, Idaho
6 Jan 16
@TypicalRussian ...You have a nack.
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• Budennovsk, Russian Federation
6 Jan 16
thank you. i am glad you liked my good start in writing poems
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@rebelann (112962)
• El Paso, Texas
6 Jan 16
I've always thought I didn't like poetry but I find I'm changing my tune, this one is really kool. Russia has a fascinating history.
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• Budennovsk, Russian Federation
6 Jan 16
Thank you. there is something special in the history of every country
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@LadyDuck (472004)
• Switzerland
5 Jan 16
Brilliant, this is a great poem and many members should read it, because there is a lot to learn about Russia in only a few lines. Congratulations, it's very difficult to write a poem in a language different from our native language.
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@LadyDuck (472004)
• Switzerland
9 Jan 16
@HazySue A lot of information in only a few line and in poetry, this is so good.
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• Budennovsk, Russian Federation
6 Jan 16
thank you for the positive response
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@HazySue (39268)
• Gouverneur, New York
9 Jan 16
@LadyDuck I agree there was a lot of information.
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• Midland, Michigan
5 Jan 16
Great job for a second poem, and you have more info in this than I would even know about, I think. After reading, Owlwings comment below, I see that you did even better than I first supposed. I too enjoyed your meter, it was easy to read and enjoyable. I'll have to go look for the first one too. I think if more people gave poetry a shot they might find something they're better at than they think or will ever know if they never try it.
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• Budennovsk, Russian Federation
6 Jan 16
thank you for wise words and positive response. i will try to go on making people glad while reading my posts
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@nanette64 (20364)
• Fairfield, Texas
5 Jan 16
Very well done @TypicalRussian .
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• Budennovsk, Russian Federation
6 Jan 16
thank you for the kind words
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@JudyEv (341824)
• Rockingham, Australia
5 Jan 16
Thanks for the suggestion @jaboUK and congratulations @TypicalRussian. That is a very nice poem.
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• Budennovsk, Russian Federation
6 Jan 16
thanks for your reply. perhaps everything is possible if you really want it
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@Namelesss (3365)
• United States
5 Jan 16
Impressive! Lyrical and bold. I really enjoyed this one. Nod to @MALUSE for the suggestion. :)
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• Budennovsk, Russian Federation
6 Jan 16
thank you for the reply. i will try to continue writing good posts
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@Darroch (245)
• United Kingdom
5 Jan 16
That's excellent. Both interesting and enjoyable to read. Well done!
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• Budennovsk, Russian Federation
6 Jan 16
thank you. i am glad you liked my first step in poetry
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@vandana7 (100546)
• India
5 Jan 16
Nice...Stalin and Putin got to stand side by side! I thought Gorbachev deserved a mention. :) Never mind...very nice..:)
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• Budennovsk, Russian Federation
6 Jan 16
thank you. that was simple poem, perhaps i will mention more people in a poem one day
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@LeaPea2417 (37369)
• Toccoa, Georgia
5 Jan 16
That is a nice poem, you get me in the mood to try and write my own poem.
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@LeaPea2417 (37369)
• Toccoa, Georgia
6 Jan 16
@TypicalRussian yours is good, You do have a talent in writing them.
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• Budennovsk, Russian Federation
6 Jan 16
go ahead! i hope you will be able to do it better
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@DaddyEvil (137501)
• United States
5 Jan 16
Very nice. You told the story with an almost lyrical beat to it, sir! I am impressed and looking further down the thread, see I am not the only one who thinks you did this very well since this is not even your native tongue! Congratulations!
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• Budennovsk, Russian Federation
6 Jan 16
thank you. i will try not to let you down in the future posts
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@anh101 (1379)
6 Jan 16
great efforts are yours since I think most of the non-native English speakers just set the target of being able to communicate (orally) in English. That's how you are different
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• Budennovsk, Russian Federation
6 Jan 16
thanks for your support
@anh101 (1379)
6 Jan 16
@TypicalRussian you are welcome
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@andriaperry (117138)
• Anniston, Alabama
5 Jan 16
That is awesome! I enjoyed this poem.
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• Budennovsk, Russian Federation
6 Jan 16
thank you. mylot shows you are from Alabama. say hello to Forrest Gump
@fishtiger58 (29820)
• Momence, Illinois
5 Jan 16
I understand English is not your native tongue. Well done. English is my first language and I can't write a poem this good. I enjoyed it.
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• Budennovsk, Russian Federation
6 Jan 16
thank you. you are exeggerating. and you are a professional in your own sphere
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@fishtiger58 (29820)
• Momence, Illinois
6 Jan 16
@TypicalRussian Nope I'm not can't write a lick
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