First work shared,opinions?

January 18, 2019 5:44pm CST
I'm sorry for what I've done These games just don't seem fun look around and see everything oh my god what have I done my heart beats faster Tearing every thought after, Each tear drips into a crystal chalice, Each much prettier then her This space Fills and I run away like Alice Chasing a pointless thing like a picture palace All these monsters I see shall I turn away with a bend of the knee and curtesy or will this be the last thing I ever see
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@didinedhia (8470)
• Algeria
21 Jan 19
wow , im impressed , thank you so much , give us more
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• Algeria
22 Jan 19
@Nankuhh2001 thank you , but you should right a book (poems book) and sell it
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22 Jan 19
@didinedhia really you think so
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22 Jan 19
I definitely will
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@Happy2BeMe (99380)
• Canada
18 Jan 19
Very emotional and powerful
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18 Jan 19
Thank you I’ve thought about publishing them
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@Happy2BeMe (99380)
• Canada
19 Jan 19
@Nankuhh2001 I think you should
• New Delhi, India
19 Jan 19
Wow. Every poem's words are rhyming together