--------------------My version of BOOK ----7-----------------------
By chandanrpai
@chandanrpai (244)
India
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@chandanrpai (244)
• India
23 Dec 06
now would you like me to continue...
please post your comments.....
i' am waiting...
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@chandanrpai (244)
• India
23 Dec 06
kya ppl no comments...
i have already written the next part common please any comments man....
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@chandanrpai (244)
• India
1 Feb 07
hi guys..i had been ill and hence could not write much ..but thanks for checking up...
@chandanrpai (244)
• India
2 Feb 07
hit one with three stunners before he went down. But he was also hit in the leg. "Ron snorted "Big fat bloke. Woundn't be surprised if he was a small giant." Hermione said "Well the other ...me and ron took him out but snape.....snape just looked at them. Didn't even try to defend himself. Just walked away." Ron said "Yeah. Scary though. We searched for you but with Mr weasly wounded in the leg we sent two aurors when our search was unsuccessful." Harry now got up and with bitter regret he narrated his tale. The aftermath was in silence. Ron and hermione both their mouths wide open gaped at harry." "Snape l-l -let you go? Why did he do that and why did he stun himself" Hermione said "Thats fine and dandy but those words ' he is still loyal to dumbledore.' I don't believe him harry. After 16 years he killed dumbledore. It sounds like a ruse to me. You had better be careful. He could have taken himself out on voldemort's orders to earn your trust. Get you closer to voldemort." Harry said" well that does make sense. "Ron also wanted part of this conversation "I still think he's nothing more than a greasy skunk." With that tone their conversation ended when mr weasly entered looking highly anxious. He had a letter with him."Trouble dad?" asked ron. Mr weasly looked very stressed out now "Tomorrow...
@sunnypub (2128)
• United States
8 Jan 07
I love how you have Harry being so one sighted. Harry probably does know how to read the will but since he is so stuck on finding the horcruxes and killing Voldermort he isn't thinking straight. I think that is right on the money for Harry's character. Good job, keep writing and we'll keep reading.
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@chandanrpai (244)
• India
9 Jan 07
In harry's 6 years at hogwarts he had some intresting encounters concerning his parents. In his first year he actually saw his parents - more like their images in the mirror of erised which showed the viewer what was his heart's desire. In his fifth year, he stumbled into snape's pensive and viewed his parent's school days. Although the aftermath of this incident gave harry second thoughts about his father. His heart's desire still remained with his parents. But in his fourth his parents were part of a fierce duel between him and voldemort after his comeback. The priori incantum spell occured when a wand duelled with its brother. They were going to godric's hollow by a ministry train. Onboard Ron, Hermoine joined him and Mr Weasly. When harry met them he asked "How'd your undercover jobs go?" There wasn't any trouble but still..." The journey would take three hours. Harry asked Mr Weasly "How come we could not go by floo powder or apparate. It would be a lot faster?" Mr weasly responded " Well harry, we do not know the exact location of godric's hollow.Very few people live there and ther are no working fireplaces. Also even if one knew and wanted to apparate there it would be impossible because no one has been successful in apparating there in the past few years. After that incident when..." Mr weasly looked down. Harry understood and said " Its OK." Mr Weasly continued " 17 years ago the residents there by some means put a charm that prevents anyone to reach it. Its something similar to hogwarts. Also portkeys are out and we have tried other means but unsuccessful. Now I must warn you harry. We have to make this visit very short. Rufus Scrimgeour still opposes this decision of us going there but in the end I persuaded him" Harry looked a little puzzeled "Why?" "He has his reasons, Harry."
Halfway through their journey Mr Weasly said he had to talk to the aurors on board about something and left the compartment. As soon as he left harry looked straight at ron and hermione and asked " How many people did you inform about the horcruxes ?" They looked a liitle puzzeled. Hermione said " None harry Its just between three of us. " Harry looked at the floor with rage. Either she was lying or someone else besides them and voldemort knew about the horcruxs. "Wait a second ?" said hermione. "Are you telling me someone mentioned the horcrues to you ?" said hermione. "Yeah Lupin and moody mentioned them at the dursley's place and Scrimgeour did when I met him at his study today" Ron said " Thats weird mate. We shut our mouths May be dumbledore mentioned it to lupin or moody when he found out about them." Harry said " Thats a possibility, but scrimgeour ? how did he know about them. I don't think dumbledore or lupin or moody would in their right mind mention it to him." Now he was puzzled. Harry looked at them feeling a little shameful and asked "Are you..." "NO" said hermoine "We are not lying harry! This is a crucial task. I am in fact a little afraid that someone has leaked the horcrux secret to the ministry." Harry smiled and said "Right.". He waled out of the compartment giving an excuse that he needed to strech his legs. As he left a strange thought provoked.....
@abhifriend (17)
• India
21 Mar 07
Azkaban????but what is in azkaban that would serve as a horcrux???if something was there the ministry officials would have noticed???anyways its your story and its going really strong.keep up the marvellous work!!!!
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@chandanrpai (244)
• India
22 Mar 07
Lupin looked back at the island "A tipoff. One of the aurors uncovered an artifect. Didn't specify what it really was. But it gave out strange light. It also seemed alive. Gave signals and sounds." Harry looked puzzled. Voldemort wanted something really special to keep his soul in. Dumbledore hinted it could be huffelpuff's cup, ravenclaw's or the snake nagini. This was too strange to be a horcrux. As they reached the island the area became dark and foggy. They climbed ashore and walked. Harry saw it for the first time. A gigantic sinister looking fortress. It was very similar to those castles in grim fairy tales. It looked threatining and the tide was coming in and roared. This place and the dementors could drive any person on the verge of insanity . And to think Sirius spent 12 years here. As they walked towards the drawbridge when someone came screaming towards them. It was an auror. He was wounded and nearly collapsed at lupin's feet. Lupin bent down immediately and asked "What happened?" The aurors was choaking for words "They're back. The dementors. Taken out almost all the aurors." He choked more and bllod spurted from his mouth "Harry Potter. You must leave. They know you are here."
@chandanrpai (244)
• India
22 Mar 07
The auror became unconcious. Lupin felt his pulse and told harry anxiously "Well harry . This I didn't forsee. You have to leave." He stood up and said "Hold on to me. I'll try to apparate from here." Harry said suddenly "I think Id rather stay than leave." Lupin looked nervous "Harry this is serious. I am not going to let you go in there. If the dementors have taken out most of the aurors what chance do the 2 of us have." But hary just walked ahead "I don't care what you say. I am going in and finding that horcrux. "lupin was just about to stop him when he said "All right. But we must leave if things get out of control." With that tone harry and lupin entered azkaban. As soon as harry entered the wicked fortress, his scar hurt like the fires of hell. He looked around and saw delusions and images. His parents. He saw dumbledore. "Do you see that?" he asked lupin. Lupin said "No harry . Its the dementors. Their presence in numbers are large and they are entering your head. This is precisely the reason we need to leave now." Harry said "NO! Ive faced them before and I'll do it again." But then why did his scar hurt. As he walked further the searing pain in his scar hurt so much that he felt that his head was about to split. Soon his pain became unbearabel. He fell on the flooring . Lupin crouched down and said "HARRY! WHAT IS IT?" Harry slowly opened his eyes. The pain had come down. "He's here. Vodemort's here."
Harry got up. He was feeling feverish. His eyes looked pale, Lupin said "Harry...?"
"Professor Lupin I cannot stop I dont know what is going to happen? I may not come back. But I must go...
@abhifriend (17)
• India
6 Mar 07
brilliant!!!
but are we sure this is the real moody and not an impostor.
i mean, ur story is so good that its difficult to see further than u write.
keep up the good work!!!
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@chandanrpai (244)
• India
9 Mar 07
"Look professer moody. I have to stay here, this is important to me." Moody now became aggresive"Look potter. Can't say whether you'll be back in time. But I have made some progress. I mean to say me and lupin have in finding the location of the next horcrux. "Harry was mystified. He was standing between his best friend's brother's wedding and a horcrux. If he left now he would miss what was very important to him but if he didn't he was overlooking a vital sign of voldemort's soul. Moody stood in front of him and said "look i am not going to force you. Its your choice." Harry looked at the burrow with its beautiful decorations. A sinking feeling was inside him. He looked sadly at it and turned his head to moody. With a deep breath he said "Lets go"..
Moody and harry were running as fast as they could through the green field. After a few minutes moody took out his boot and placed it on the ground. With a flick of his wand he muttered "Portus". "Hold on potter" he said and they both grabbed the portkey . Instantly that familiar sinking sensation as back again as they drifted weightless around and finally hit solid ground. Harry could smell the air. It was getting colder and colder. "We have to walk a little before we meet up with our contact." Harry followed moody very closely and as they walked on the silent beach, moody kept his wand out and was looking left and right as if he was expecting some sort of attack. After a while moody urged harry to stop and he was looking around. They were staring at a huge hill where the moon was overlooking....
@chandanrpai (244)
• India
9 Mar 07
Moody was looking at it with deep curiosity. Suddenly there was a howl as loud as anyone could hear and out of the hill, out o the moonlight jumped a fericious looking werewolf. It skidded on the hill and stopped right in front of them. Harry's insides were paining. What was going on? At that exact moment the werewolf's parts changed and standing in front of them was the less threatning figure of remus lupin. Lupin looked at harry and smiled "Professor slughorn conjured me a potion that enables me to control my mind when I transform. In form I am a werewolf but my thoughts are still human." Moody said"Well Remus. Your know what to do. Ihave to go. Mc gonigall needs me and shackbolt for some work for the order." With that note he walked back and dissaperared i the fog which was forming now. Lupin said "Well harry .I guess we know where the location of the net horcrux is . I'll give you a clue. This forming fog." Harry had no idea what he was talking about. Lupin understood this and smiled. "Well it is quite confusing but Ill make things clear. Follow me."Harry fo
@abhifriend (17)
• India
3 Mar 07
heeeyyyyy wheres the next part to your superb story???now that you reached such an interesting part i dont think u should be allowed to stop writing!!!so post the next one super-faaast!!!
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@chandanrpai (244)
• India
3 Mar 07
Its your destiny.Your destiny." At these words garry's mind was at ease. He did promise ginny he would tell her about the horcruxes when the time is right. But now he had to set his mind on other things. He looked sadly at the night sky. It brought a tear to his eyes. The stars at night reminded him of the robes dumbledore used to wear - stars and moons and his half moon specticles. How could he die. Harry and dumbledore spent countless hours together in his six years of hogwarts. Very often he heard "Nothing can harm you harry as long as dumbledore is here." In his first year dumbledore told him about his mother's love. In his second he proved to harry that he was a true gryffindor. In his third he was the only one who understood what harry went through when wormtail escaped. In his fourth he honored him for his battle against voldemort. In his fifth he told harry everything about his past and destiny. And in the sixth, harry and dumbledore worked together to find the horcruxes and voldemort's past. Yes it was true dumbledore gave his heart and soul to protect harry and fight alongside him with voldemort. He stood by his side and made the ministry drop the charges against him in his fifth year when he was accused of using a patronus in surrey. Dumbledore was a ray of hope to harry. A father figure. But still dumbledore held harry in higher regard than even himself. That was proved when he gave his life away to the hands of severus snape. Now harry knew it was all upto him. He alone was destined to find and destroy the remaining four horcruxes. Dumbledore's spirit was within him and he felt no one else was to die in his battle against voldemort. He would not risk the life of ginny or anybody else now that dumbledore was gone.
@chandanrpai (244)
• India
3 Mar 07
Harry was awakened by Mrs weasly at 4 in the morning. Ron in his room was cursing"Mum. Its too early . Can't get a little more sleep?. The wedding isn't for hours." But mrs weasly was in no mood for explanations "Ron, ge up at once. We have to get the chapel ready for bill and fleur. Charlie has arrived and even fred and george are working downstairs. Ron refused to wake up. At that exact moment george apparated inside ron's room. "Trouble?" he asked . Mrs weasly said "Your brother refuses to get up." George smiled "Tut.tu. Simplest thing in the world." George went to ron's bed and slipped something under his blanket. Within seconds ron jumped lightning fast from his bed and so high that he nearly hit the ceiling. "WHAT THE BLOODY HELL IS THAT THING?" He bellowed. George laughed and took out the tarantula that he slipped in ron's bed "This is lee's tarantula. He's come for the wedding." Mrs weasly now said "Now if you finished having fun would you please put this on and come downstairs." She threw ron a dress robe. It wasn't as bad as the one he had 3 years ago, but still he felt it was below his dignity to wear this. George then said "Im sure you'll look lovely in that." and disapparated just in time when ron gave him an extremely rude hand gesture. He went downstairs and met harry and hermione who was wearing a formal gown. Harry was still wearinghis bottle green tux that he wore during the yule ball. Ron said lazily "Why this early?" Hermione said "Well apparantly, there is a lot of work to be done in setting up the chapel." Mrs weasly came in and said "Oh hermione dear. Would you as to be kind and help ginny with the decorations outsid. Too much for her. "She looked at ron and said "Charlie needs your help. He's bringing some animals for the wedding. No its not dragons."
@chandanrpai (244)
• India
3 Mar 07
looking at the expressions on ron's face. Now only harry was left alone. "How can I help mrs weasly?" "Oh harry? I nearly forgot. I hear someone from the order is coming to pick you up. Apparantly you're wanted. But don't worry they promised to drop you back for the wedding." Harry stepped out on the lawn. Everywhere he saw there were people working setting up decorations. Even fred and george were actually doing sensible work. Handy work. Harry was waiting for the order member when charlie came and they shook hands."Harry glad to see you again. Been really busy past few months. But I wouldn't miss this for the world." He was just about to dash away when he said "Oh harry. There's someone waiting for you outside .I got a letter today that you're to meet with a member of the order." Harry walked on the front lawn and went outside. Moody was standing there. His electric blue eye was spinning like crazy all around . He immediately got hold of harry "Potter you have to come with me." Harry looked back but moody saw this "Look Potter. This is more important than any wedding." Harry was now angry "Look professor ...
@chandanrpai (244)
• India
3 Feb 07
Thanks Tatsuya....you'll know about snape..but not now..if he's good or bad...but right now you r going to have a great twist in the story...
Thanks for the reply and that too as a new response..
Thank you once again.
@chandanrpai (244)
• India
3 Feb 07
George continued "if anybody is dumb is enough that is." Hermione and the twins left the room. Harry lay on his bed. He looked outside the window and saw ron cleaning the lawn and cursing.
Harry got up from his bed and went down with the intention that he was going to help ron clean the lawn. As he stepped outside he met a very sour ron weasly. "She thinks she can seriously push me around all the time. No I m not perfect percy, always following the rules and look how he turned out. A pitiless rat." Harry had heard this a hundred times. Always Mrs weasly would compare ron and fred and george with their powerful predecessors. Not that it affected fred and george in any way but still ron felt he had a duty to outshine all his brothers and set an example for ginny. At that exact moment ginny weasly came out onto the lawn. Ron gave a look and started arranging the lawn furniture. Ginny said "You know Ronald, you can use magic or unless you're too scared to blow up something what your doing is fine." Ron was furious but the idea struck to him "You know that....I'm sure....oh fine. I would have thought of it anyway." He continued working. Ginny and harry sat side by side on a table.
Ginny asked "So harry I heard you went to godric's hollow yesterday." Harry asked "How'd you know that? Come to think of it even fred and george knew it." Ginny laughed "We overheard dad shouting it at mum during their fight. So you really saw your...." she could'nt come to those words.Harry sighed "No, snape picked that moment to make a guest appearance and spoil the whole trip." He dared not say what snape really did. "We did see bagman though."
@chandanrpai (244)
• India
30 Jan 07
Next post will be posted as soon as possible..thank you for your opinions..
@kellahinx (370)
• United States
26 Dec 06
I know that it is impossible to know what jkr will do, but I'm sorry, I don't think this story is at all likely.
besides the multiple errors, there are things that just couldn't happen. like harry can't twitch when hes under the full body bind. also, jkr makes it pretty clear that wizards go some place when they die and this is the "place behind the veil" not some secret chamber. If you have ever read the similrilian by tolkein it is very similar to what happens when elves die in his book. their souls still exist somewhere.
the only part i liked is that when the blood protection breaks harry and petunia hear lily.
what was that part about a bloody voldemort cutting veins? that part wasn't even clear to me.
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@chandanrpai (244)
• India
27 Dec 06
I must first thank you for your opinion and would definetly give a +...and i assure you that all the doubts would be cleared as the story proceeds.
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@chandanrpai (244)
• India
27 Dec 06
Along the dark woods harry , moody and lupin were walking franticly .Harry kept asking where they were going but moody kept shooting not-now-boy looks at harry. When they reached the river which was near london , moody took out his wand and muttered "Lumos" .Lupin followed suit .Moody looked at lupin "Well remus !! what do you think?" Lupin said "Well harry's done this before . Quite possible he can do it again." Moody reached into his robe and took out a familiar green looking object which harry remember looked like a wrap of rat tails. "Gillyweed?" asked harry." This river leads somewhere?" Lupin said "Well harry! The place where you need to seek sanctuary is deep underwater." Moody spoke "Potter ..you have to swim underwater for nearly an hour ...can you do it or to make it more clearer "you have to do it". Harry asked "Where does this pathway lead." Moody said "Potter we cannot tell you that now .All you have to do is swim underwater and you'll reach a point where a messeger will be waiting and don't ask me who it is now..."said moody when harry was going to open his mouth. But lupin said "Don't worry harry. The pathway leads to an fountain in a place you are very much familiar with .An auror will be waiting at the fountain." Moody said "The messenger will guide you to your destination." Now moody put out his wand and chucked the gillyweed in harry's palm "remember potter ,swim as fast as you can .Your gills won't last forever." With that lupin said "See you soon harry" and he and moody disappeared. Harry looked at the gillyweed and was trying to guess who this 'guide' underwater is going to be. It could be one of the merpeople but they have centaur - like attitude towards humans. So without wasting anymore time harry swallowed the gillyweed ,felt the same sickening sensation and jumped into the river.
Harry felt the very same sensation that he had 3 years ago during his second task at the triwizard tournament. His lungs were replaced with gills and his feet became flippers. Harry swam deep underwater .What was strange was that the river was only some 15 feet deep .He certainly could swim without gillyweed .But his theory was overuled when he swam for nealry forty five minutes . He kept looking all around for his guide .He prayed that he didn't miss it .Harry was still swimming when suddenly was bewildered when a voice entered his head .He recognized it .It was slughorn. 'Slughorn ?' harry thought. The voice spoke "Harry look to your left " Harry obeyed and saw an iron door which was embedded on the side. Slughorn's voice boomed 'open it'. Harry swam to the door and with all his strength and with difficulty pryed it open . 'Now follow the guide' .What guide? Harry looked around .he wound up in an underwater area ...pitch black .Harry felt he was blind.Where was he to go.Then suddenly A small bright spot appaeared in the distance.It glowed brightly.Against his better wishes harry swam towards the spot. He came closer and closer until the light vanished and its place another illuminated in the distance.Harry went towards it and soon it became clear that his 'guide' was a pathway of illuminated spots.Harry followed and finally reached the biggest spot .He had five minutes before his gills would disappear.Harry swam as fast as he could .The final spot illuminated a doorway.Harry who knew this was the end of his journey opened the doorway.Just as the door was opening harry stared at the final bright spot which was still shining brightly.Out of curiosity he took out his hand and put in right into the hold .What happened next was something that shocked him .A shining white hand came out and touched his and a figure was slowly coming out of the bright illuminated spot. It was just about to reveal itself when harry was dragged at high speed away from the spot. He was sucked into the doorway .As he veritcally was hauled.
harry closed his eyes and next moment he opened them .He was flying out of a fountain and crash landed on his back on solid ground .With agonizing pain harry looked around to see where he was and sure enough standing in front of him was the fountain with a witch , a wizard , a centaur ,a goblin and a house elf in solid gold .He was back in the ministry of magic
"Welcome Potter" .Harry was startled. Standing behind him was the last person he expected to see.
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@chandanrpai (244)
• India
27 Dec 06
hey guys ...
i am desperatly waiting for your comments...please.
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@wickedstepma (940)
• United States
25 Feb 07
Interesting.
I always like reading fan fiction, especially to hold me over while I'm waiting for the next book in a series.
Have you posted in any fanfic sites?
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@chandanrpai (244)
• India
3 Mar 07
Hi buddy..no i haven't posted anywhere except here..but thanks for the compliment..
@abhifriend (17)
• India
17 Mar 07
heyyy!!!where's the next part??u cant leave us in the middle of the story!!!its getting so damn interesting.write soon.
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@chandanrpai (244)
• India
18 Mar 07
Harry followed him into fog. During that time he asked "How did you know about the horcruxes sir?"
Lupin looked at harry and said"Well .I can't tell you that now harry . No . It wasn't ron and hermione. But I reassure you. Only a very few people know about it. I cannot name them now." Before harry could say another word the fog cleared and they were standing on the shore. Lupin pointed out to sea and said "Can you see that?" Harry looked hard and in the distance he saw an island. Very dim. It was very far into the sea. Lupin looked at harry with a feeling of fear "Thats where we think the next horcrux is located." Harry asked "What is that place?" Lupin looked at harry with emiotionless eyes "A prison called Azkaban."
CHAPTER 3: THE SUFFERING
Harry was speechles "A-Azkaban?" he said. Over the years he had heard dreadful stories of this forsaken prison. It was the most horrfying place in the world. People close to him had been here before and their reaction when they came back was inhuman. Lupin understood harry's thoughts and said" Don't worry. The dementors have abandoned the fortress. We have aurors guarding the prison." Lupin took harry towards an old boat. He said "We have to take precautions. This area is nearly haunted. When the dementors left the ministry were losing control over the prisoners of azkaban. There were riots. Well its not surprising seeing that the only thing that makes azkaban the last place to be are the dementors." harry got on to the boat and lupin took out his wand and muttered "Movimiento". The boat startedmoving towards the island. During the journey harry asked "How do you know the horcrux is in te island?"...
@consultrainer (4991)
• India
5 Apr 07
well, Sir, are you adding the instalment today?
it is almost over a week. and I have found that you are logging in frequently.
what are you waiting for?
Please give us the next instalment of HARRY POTTER
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@chandanrpai (244)
• India
9 Apr 07
Actually i am having my exams going on...
so please bear with me ..
@chiragkhetani (23)
• India
27 Jun 07
wow its wonderful story
you r very creative
keep it up
best of luck
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@Tatsuya (1149)
• United States
25 Feb 07
Okay, so where's this post at? My birthday was on the 23rd, so I was waiting for the next post by you on the 24th, and I figured it could be my late b-day present. So where is it?! Don't leave me hanging now, I've been waiting this whole time!
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@chandanrpai (244)
• India
3 Mar 07
I am extremly sorry for that tatsuya..due to some circumstances i could not keep up to my word..
sorry..
@chandanrpai (244)
• India
10 Feb 07
Thank you ..I am sorry for this but i need to leave for some place ,where , unfortunately I would not be able to access net..so it would not be possible for me to write the post untill 24th of this month,..
Thank you for bearing me.
@chandanrpai (244)
• India
13 Jan 07
Ah thanks ....Its just a passion,what i want from you is just the opinions ..Thank you.
@sunnypub (2128)
• United States
27 Dec 06
I hear what kellahinx is saying about this not being what jkr would write but I have to say that I never expected this to be the same as jkr could write.
You are putting your own spin on it and writing your version. You are not trying to write what you think jkr would write.
I think you are doing a great job. I keep coming back and reading the new entries and I am enjoying it. Keep it up.
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@chandanrpai (244)
• India
27 Dec 06
Thank you very much. you really have boosted my confidence and have really inspired me i will try my level best to meet up to your expectations. Thank you.
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@abhifriend (17)
• India
24 Feb 07
wow chandan really good story...i just joined mylot recently and read through ur story.incredible,fascinating,gripping,thrilling...i'll run outta words before i describe ur story and you.the twists and turns..jkr will have a tough time matching up to your story.
keep on writing,i'll be here to read your posts regularly.i really wish i could write like you!!!best of luck man,keep writing this wonderful story!!!
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@chandanrpai (244)
• India
24 Feb 07
hi abhi thanks for the complement..
I am sure you too will be able to write ..
Thank you once again..
Keep pouring in your opinions thanks..