Do you like it? please be honest.
By weezy250m
@weezy250m (1892)
United States
January 23, 2007 12:29am CST
you know ho you are,
you are the one who stripped my whole life from me,
the one who hurt me, and said that you loved me at the same time.
the one who controlled me and everything i did.
yet i still loved you back
you know who you are
the one who had my family between your fingers,
you were the one who had them turn their backs on me when i needed them most, it was you who they believed, not me.
i dont understand how you did it,but you did,and you did it well
i would ask why you would hurt me so badly
you said becaus you liked to see me bleed and beg you for my life
it was you that made that i couldnt even leave my own home with out fear, it was you who put these scares on me,i have always
prayed that happiness would come again. but i know it wont.
i know who you are and you know who you are.
2 people like this
3 responses
@dreammeister (22)
• India
28 Jan 07
That is a pretty sad thing you wrote. But you write it very well. Are you a writer or a poet or something? Because I think you are very good on expressing your feeling through writing.
@weezy250m (1892)
• United States
29 Jan 07
I am glad you guys liked it. The thought just popped into my head. And I got very emotional that I feel the urge to put into words. And that's the result coming out from it. I didn't exepect that people would really like what I've wrote.
@samtaylorskykierajen (7977)
• Canada
23 Jan 07
I really like how you worded that . If you wrote that you did a very nice job of it . I am no good at wording things but I know when I read something if I like how it was worded or not and I truely believe you did an awesome job . I am hoping this wasn't about you though becasue it is very sad .
1 person likes this
@kavita23 (2995)
• India
30 Jan 07
Well, dear, I have to say that it was a pretty good poem for an 11 year old. It certainly shows a lot of emotion. I hope you don't feel that way now, though. If you do, you have to let go of those negative and fearful feelings. At your age, you need to have fun and joy in your life. If you can't talk to your parents, find another adult that you trust, such as your pastor, a teacher or a counselor at school. Then write a poem that expresses happiness. Negative feelings can be very destructive.
happy mylot day.
